Talk:Heavenly Delusion/GA1
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Nominator: Tintor2 (talk · contribs) 22:02, 30 September 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: TeenAngels1234 (talk · contribs) 18:01, 30 October 2024 (UTC)
Stay tuned.--TeenAngels1234 (talk) 18:01, 30 October 2024 (UTC)
- Can you write something more in the lead about recepiton and the awards received?
- Done
- In "Premise" is not explained what Heaven means, unlike the lead. Also. Why is named "Premise" and not "Plot"?
- Renamed. This isn't the entire plot as the manga is still ongoing and still solving mysteries like what exactly ended the world or what happened to the protagonits' families and origins. Expanding it without explaining more would come across as original research as the writer constantly teases the reader with fake twists like the relation of timeskips.
- I think kaiju needsa wlink and to be in italics.
- Done
- Do we seriously need this long list of characters with just a vague presentation? Also, since the article is mostly about the manga, I think it doesn't really fits there. Maybe you can trim a bit, leaving just the most important characters - with longer and sourced presentations -, and create a "List of Heavenly Delusion character" article. Furthermore, don't know if the voice actors are pertinent, since, again, the article is about the manga, not the anime adaptation. Pleace, use other sources if you can, possibly indipendent.
- Done
- "In the post-apocalyptic world of Heavenly Delusion, social constructs like laws and rights groups no longer function". It sounds a little bit of strange put this sentence there. Maybe it's more fitting into another part?
- Done
- "Because the character "heaven" will appear, he uses "heaven" but he also wanted to use "dai" in the middle and then added "hell"". This doesn't make much sense without the nihongo template with the original Japanese kanas and pronunciations.
- Rephrased.
- Facultative, but: can you create the article for Dogra Magra? It seems encyclopedical and would be useful. Anyway, please delete the ";" before the period.
- Done.
- Is transsexual with two S correct?
- Done
- Are there other reviews or infos about the sold copies?
- Sadly. The publisher hasn't released more about sales. It kinda seems the anime overshadowed it when it comes to a review.
@Tintor2: That's all. The main problem, basically, is the chracter section. When everything is fixed I can pass it. It is relatevily a short article, but considering that the manga is still going on I can understand that.
- @TeenAngels1234: Thanks for the review.Tintor2 (talk) 21:23, 30 October 2024 (UTC)
- Found an old book analysing the series so I added it to reception. Tintor2 (talk) 22:06, 30 October 2024 (UTC)
- @Tintor2: Good, but I think the new analysis content it's more fitting in the Themes section. Also, since now you mentioned in the lead, consider creating the Japan Expo Awards article. That's all. I think when these two things are solved I can easily pass this.--TeenAngels1234 (talk) 10:25, 1 November 2024 (UTC)
- Is it well written?
- A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:
- B. It complies with the manual of style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation:
- A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:
- Is it verifiable with no original research?
- A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline:
- B. All in-line citations are from reliable sources, including those for direct quotations, statistics, published opinion, counter-intuitive or controversial statements that are challenged or likely to be challenged, and contentious material relating to living persons—science-based articles should follow the scientific citation guidelines:
- C. It contains no original research:
- D. It contains no copyright violations nor plagiarism:
- A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline:
- Is it broad in its coverage?
- A. It addresses the main aspects of the topic:
- B. It stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style):
- A. It addresses the main aspects of the topic:
- Is it neutral?
- It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each:
- It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each:
- Is it stable?
- It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:
- It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:
- Is it illustrated, if possible, by images?
- A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
- B. Images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
- A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
- Overall:
- Pass or Fail:
- Final comments: While the article is brief, I consider all the parameters respected, since it's a manga series still being published. The fast edits by the main editor helped. Good work.--TeenAngels1234 (talk) 10:53, 1 November 2024 (UTC)
- Pass or Fail:
