Talk:Harry Fulton/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Jim Sweeney (talk · contribs) 19:48, 2 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

As I seem to be on a New Zealand edit spree, will do this one. Review to follow. Jim Sweeney (talk) 19:48, 2 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for criteria)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars etc.:
It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

Comments

His nickname is not mentioned anywhere in the body of the article so, it needs a cite in the info box.

This is not in the sources close to hand. Will retrieve the main source (Austin, 1924) from my local library early next week to check this.

Strangely, I cannot find where I got Fulton's nickname. I have deleted it for the time being. Zawed (talk) 05:23, 6 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

In the lead

Second Boer War (which is linked) not Boer War so its clear which one it is. Done
Link Transvaal Done
Furlough is an Americanism I would leave it as leave, also it should have been linked at first use. Sick leave Done
Western Front needs linking Done
to die on active service or were killed on active service - ref is for killed I presume Done

Early life

I would add a ref here - Fulton was born at Dalhousie in India on 15 August 1869. - even if ref name as its a statement of fact.

I hadn't realised it wasn't covered by cite 1 - the stuff about his father was inserted later in the writing of this article. I think the cite for location will come from Austin so will check this.

Yes, as I suspected this fact came from Austin. Now cited. Zawed (talk) 05:23, 6 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

I would red link Dunedin City Guards, as there seems enough for an article [1] Done

Military career

Were not all the Indian Regiments 'native' instead - which provided officers for the regiments of the Indian Army. Done

Boer War

As above Second Boer War Done
Link captain Done
link commandos Done
link Transvaal Done
returned to his Indian Army unit - Indian Army regiment Done
awarded the Distinguished Service Order - invested as a Companion of the Distinguished Service Order Done

First World War

Furlough - leave Done
command of an infantry battalion - do we know which one ?

I think it was the only infantry battalion of the SEF, but will check this.

It was a composite infantry battalion, the only infantry that was part of the SEF. Have changed to refer to "the infantry battalion". Zawed (talk) 05:23, 6 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

link Wellington Done

Senussi Campaign

he was appointed commander of a regiment... initially known as the Trentham Regiment - do we know what it was later called and add to inf box

It became the NZ Rifle Brigade (with the addition of two more battalions).

Fulton remained in Cairo for a time but by January 1916 joined his command in the field - what command its not clear Done
Major-General A. Wallace Done
The Rifle Brigade - The brigade or New Zealand Rifle Brigade Done

Have also abbreviated to NZRB; in some places, I refer to "the brigade" to avoid close repetition of NZRB.

to command of the brigade's 1st Battalion - did the battalion not have a regimental name ? The New Zealand Division calls them X Battalion New Zealand Rifle Brigade

The battalions were numbered. I have chosen not to recite the full name.

Western Front

link Armentieres Done
Fulton led the Rifle Brigade - as above brigade etc Done
he was appointed a Companion - invested Done
front lines can be linked Done
Fulton returned to the brigade in November, and despite his time away from the brigade, the second brigade is redundant Done
He had also been mentioned twice in dispatches during the year - He had also been mentioned in dispatches twice Done
link Western Front Done (added to first para of this section)
link Colincamps Done
link artillery barrage Done
Doullens can be linked but not the cemetery Done
link Brockenhurst Done
I know its linked but French could be added here - awarded the Croix de Guerre

Not sure what you meant here as link is to French name; I have italicised?

Actually, I think I figured out what you may have meant; have linked to the French award for WWI. Zawed (talk) 04:52, 4 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Notes

web links need an access date Done

Suggestion

The London Gazette could be used to beef up the references for his military service [2] and [3]

Have added one for his promotion to lieutenant in 1894.

This is a really good article, well done, just some very minor points. Happy to discuss any changes. Jim Sweeney (talk) 10:05, 3 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the comprehensive review Jim. I have addressed most of your points, commented on a couple of others and there are a couple more for which I need to get a book out of my local library for confirmation. I'll do this on Monday/Tuesday. Zawed (talk) 20:07, 3 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Jim, I have responded to all your points now. Let me know if there are

any other issues. Zawed (talk) 05:23, 6 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

passed GA Jim Sweeney (talk) 08:05, 6 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]