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Reviewer: Sasata (talk) 17:00, 6 November 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Hi, I've signed up for this review. I'll have some comments up in a day or three. Sasata (talk) 17:00, 6 November 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Generally looks pretty good. A few comments:

  • is the lead link to Australia necessary (I doubt there's many people who don't know what it is, and besides, it's already linked twice in the infobox)
In this edit, I changed the link to point to Australian which is the target of the redirect People of Australia, as the link should be about the people and not the country. EdChem (talk) 13:23, 20 November 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  • a link to spectroscopy and electrochemistry might be helpful
Wikilinks added in the lede (diff) and in the main text (diff), as requested / suggested. EdChem (talk) 13:23, 20 November 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  • "After the war, he founded K. H. Freeman Pty Ltd, a detergent and soap manufacturing company; Hans spent many weekends working in the factory, gaining a practical insight into chemistry." source?
I added a cross-reference to the SMH obituary (diff) which mentions his weekends working in the factory. EdChem (talk) 13:23, 20 November 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  • my new word of the day: dux
In this edit I added a wikilink to Dux#Education. I didn't realise this word was not widely used, so I have learned something here too. :) EdChem (talk) 13:23, 20 November 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  • acronym FAA linked in inbox not not explained or linked in article text
In this edit, I included a definition of FAA in the lead section. It indicates his Fellowship in the Australian Academy of Science. I have also defined AM, his other post-nomial honour. Both of these were already included in the Honours and awards section, just not with the abbreviations stated. EdChem (talk) 13:23, 20 November 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  • the end of the last paragraph of "Legacy" should get cited, else it looks like wp:crystal balling ("Freeman's work in ensuring Australian scientists have access to "big science" facilities will continue to assist researchers into the future.")
  • lead looks a little thin, maybe add a sentence about his early life and a little bit more about his career; there's currently no mention of his numerous prestigious awards either.
I have added that he was born in Germany to the lede, plus a sentence on his FAA and AM awards (diff), and a sentence on his teaching. I also expanded on his teaching in the career and legacy sections (diff). EdChem (talk) 14:52, 20 November 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for making the changes, I think everything looks to be in order. Now passing. Sasata (talk) 01:50, 21 November 2010 (UTC)[reply]