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This article is or was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Kdiddyy. Peer reviewers: Sabrina Milk.

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Hi, Your article is very informative and nicely divided. There are a few errors in sentence structures that could easily be fixed. The second sentence in your introduction is too long and can be divided into three short sentences. You might want to fix the structure of the second sentence in the career portion. I suggest: “Her short film, The Kite (1997) was her first film to gain critical recognition.” In the last sentence in Career, it is stated, “served on film festival juries in […] Arab”. That might be a typo. You should italicize the film titles in the filmography portion. I hope this was helpful! Sabrina Milk (talk) 05:48, 16 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]