Talk:HMS Moresby/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 11:29, 3 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

"previous L-class destroyer, capable" destroyer overlinked.

Done.

"First War Construction Programme" this sounds notable, should we redlink it for an article?

None of the programmes have articles yet. This could be a nice task for someone.

"The destroyer was..." last destroyer you mentioned was the rumoured German one.

Thank you. I have clarified this.

"displacement was" capital D.

Good spot.

Link long tons, unusual unit.

Done.

"shaft horsepower" link.

Done.

"296 long tons" avoid starting sentence with numeral.

Reworded.

"torpedoes.[5]The ship" space.

Done.

Could link complement to Ship's company.

Wikilinked.

"changed to Moresby.[8] The new name honoured" -> "changed to Moresby to honour"

Done.

"the Grand Fleet, joining" overlinked.

Done.

"in what would be the" in the.

Done.

"protect the battlecruisers of the Fleet" -> "of the Grand Fleet"

Done.

"the reconnaissance seaplane had been recovered" I missed this happening...

Sentence added.

"rejoined the Flotilla and" flotilla unless you use the full formal title.

Fixed.

"German High Seas Fleet. The two" overlinked.

Removed.

"after 1710 on " make it clear it's the time, i.e. 17:10 or 1710 hours or whatever MOS:TIME suggests.

Done.

"and at 2:15 turned" same. Is that 02:15, 2:15pm??

Done

"to Buncrana with" where??

Clarified.

Could convoy escort be linked to Escort Group?

I do not think it was not so formal then.

Wouldn't U-boat be a better link than submarine?

Changed.

Pennant number table, no reason to capitalise Number, and row/col scopes would be much appreciated for accessibility.

Fixed.

Ref 11, 12, should just be p.

Fixed.

That's all I have. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 19:43, 3 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

@The Rambling Man: Thank you. I have amended the article. Please tell me if there is anything else. simongraham (talk) 23:01, 3 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]