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GA Review

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This review is transcluded from Talk:HMS Marvel (1915)/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Zawed (talk · contribs) 07:20, 10 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]

I will review, comments to follow in due course. Zawed (talk) 07:20, 10 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Whoa, sorry for the length of time it has taken for me to come back to this. I really lost track of time here. Anyhow, this is in reasonable shape, just minor quibbles.

No problem. Thank you for spending the time on this.

Lead

  • ...rescued all by four of...: I think that the "by" should be "but"?
    • Good spot.

Design and development

  • The design was to achieve a speed of 36 knots...: suggest rephrasing to "The design was intended to reach a top speed of 36 knots", this to eliminate the double usage of "achieve" in this sentence.
    • Amended.
  • Some of the dimensions in this section goes to two decimal places but the corresponding dimensions in the infobox go to one decimal place. This creates some inconsistencies in the respective dimensions due to the rounding up/down.
    • Made consistent.
  • 296 long tons...: a sentence shouldn't start with a number unless written out.
    • Fixed.

Construction and career

  • "The destroyer" is used quite a bit, particularly in the 2nd paragraph.
    • Reworded.
  • the vessel was sold to be Ward of Hayle: don't think the "be" should be there?
    • Fixed.

Other stuff

  • Sources look to be good quality
  • Image tags OK
  • Dupe links: forecastle, High Seas Fleet
    • Removed.

Again, Simongraham, apologies for the delay in getting to this. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 09:03, 26 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]

@Zawed: Please do not feel you need to apologise; I appreciate your diligence. I believe the amends have been made. simongraham (talk) 23:11, 27 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]
The changes look fine, so I am passing this as a good article now, as I consider that it meets the relevant criteria. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 08:41, 29 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]