Talk:HMS Lookout (1914)/GA1

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Reviewer: Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk · contribs) 16:31, 17 July 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Destroyer is technically a duplicated link but as it's in different sections it's allowed now
- Good spot though.
No edit wars
Image is correctly licensed
Earwig reports copyvio unlikely

Is there a redirect to this page using a variation of HMS Dragon? If not I don't think you need to bold the name; she never served under it
- Removed.
Is 24 August 1922 the date of her decommissioning or her sale for scrapping (or both?)
- The source says date of sale. Ammended.

"that ~~were~~ all received"
- Removed.
Link commissioning
- Added.
The First World War is never mentioned in main text
- Added.
Was the Battle of Heligoland Bight not on 28 August?
- It seems that the ships sailed on 27 August but the encounter took place on the following day. Amended.
"succeeded to drive" > "succeeded in driving"
- Fixed.
Link refitted
- Added.
"undertaking the varied tasks typical of a destroyer's service at the time" I assume you mean the tasks you then discuss after this sentence, but the reader shouldn't be left to guess
- Clarified.
"anti-aircraft guns"
- Added.
"which were themselves" > "which was itself"
- Amended.
Surely the capture of two German trawlers is a success rather than an incident?
- True. Amended.
"flotilla supporting an attack"
- Added.
"Lookout again remaining unscathed" any particular actions she took during this engagement?
- There is nothing specific in the sources.
Link Plymouth
- Amended to Devonport as more accurate, and linked.
What did Lookout do in 1918?
- The sources do not say much, but I have added what I have.

References look good. AGF on print sources.
Corbett 1921 is not cited
- Oops. That looks like confusion between the different volumes. Fixed.

@Simongraham: Hi, that's all I have for now. Will await your responses. Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk) 15:46, 27 July 2023 (UTC)[reply]

@Pickersgill-Cunliffe: Thank you for your very thorough review. I have made some amendments. Please tell me if there is anything else. simongraham (talk) 23:32, 27 July 2023 (UTC)[reply]