Talk:HMS Indefatigable (R10)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Seabuckthorn (talk · contribs) 13:11, 7 February 2014 (UTC)
Nominator: Sturmvogel 66 (talk)

Hi! My review for this article will be here shortly. --Seabuckthorn ♥ 13:11, 7 February 2014 (UTC)

1: Well-written

• a. Prose is "clear and concise", without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors:
• b. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:

WP:LEAD:

Check for WP:LEAD: Check for Correct Structure of Lead Section:  Done Check for Citations (WP:LEADCITE):  Done Check for Introductory text:  Done Check for Provide an accessible overview (MOS:INTRO):  Done Major Point 1: Design and description "" (summarised well in the infobox, cross-checked with other FAs) Major Point 2: Construction and career "Her aircraft made several attacks … Indefatigable was sold for scrap the following year." (summarised well in the lead) Major Point 2.1: Norwegian operations "Her aircraft made several attacks against the German battleship Tirpitz in 1944 with only slight success and attacked targets in Norway with rather more success." (summarised well in the lead) Major Point 2.2: To the Pacific "She was transferred to the British Pacific Fleet (BPF) at the end of the year and attacked Japanese-controlled oil refineries in Sumatra in January 1945 before joining the American forces preparing to invade the island of Okinawa in Operation Iceberg in March. Indefatigable and the BPF joined the Americans in attacking the Japanese Home Islands in July and August" (summarised well in the lead) Major Point 2.3: Postwar "before returning to Australia after the war. She made port visits in New Zealand, Australia and South Africa before reaching home in early 1946." & "Indefatigable was modified for transport duties after her arrival and ferried troops and civilians for the rest of the year before she was reduced to reserve. She was recommissioned in 1950 as a training ship for service with the Home Fleet Training Squadron. During this time she participated in exercises with the Home Fleet and made a number of port visits overseas. The Board of Admiralty decided that she was redundant in early 1954 and she was decommissioned in October 1954. Indefatigable was sold for scrap the following year." (summarised well in the lead) Check for Relative emphasis:  Done Major Point 1: Design and description "" (part of infobox, cross-checked with other FAs) Major Point 2: Construction and career "Her aircraft made several attacks … Indefatigable was sold for scrap the following year." (the lead gives due weight as is given in the body) Major Point 2.1: Norwegian operations "Her aircraft made several attacks against the German battleship Tirpitz in 1944 with only slight success and attacked targets in Norway with rather more success." (the lead gives due weight as is given in the body) Major Point 2.2: To the Pacific "She was transferred to the British Pacific Fleet (BPF) at the end of the year and attacked Japanese-controlled oil refineries in Sumatra in January 1945 before joining the American forces preparing to invade the island of Okinawa in Operation Iceberg in March. Indefatigable and the BPF joined the Americans in attacking the Japanese Home Islands in July and August" (the lead gives due weight as is given in the body) Major Point 2.3: Postwar "before returning to Australia after the war. She made port visits in New Zealand, Australia and South Africa before reaching home in early 1946." & "Indefatigable was modified for transport duties after her arrival and ferried troops and civilians for the rest of the year before she was reduced to reserve. She was recommissioned in 1950 as a training ship for service with the Home Fleet Training Squadron. During this time she participated in exercises with the Home Fleet and made a number of port visits overseas. The Board of Admiralty decided that she was redundant in early 1954 and she was decommissioned in October 1954. Indefatigable was sold for scrap the following year." (the lead gives due weight as is given in the body) Check for Opening paragraph (MOS:BEGIN):  Done Check for First sentence (WP:LEADSENTENCE):  Done HMS Indefatigable was an Implacable-class aircraft carrier built for the Royal Navy (RN) during World War II. Check for Format of the first sentence (MOS:BOLDTITLE):  Done Check for Proper names and titles:  Done Check for Abbreviations and synonyms (MOS:BOLDSYN): None Check for Foreign language (MOS:FORLANG): None Check for Pronunciation: None Check for Contextual links (MOS:CONTEXTLINK):  Done Check for Biographies: NA Check for Organisms: NA Check for Biographies of living persons: NA Check for Alternative names (MOS:LEADALT):  Done Check for Non-English titles: Check for Usage in first sentence: Check for Separate section usage: Check for Length (WP:LEADLENGTH):  Done Check for Clutter (WP:LEADCLUTTER): None

WP:LAYOUT:

Done Check for WP:LAYOUT:  Done Check for Body sections: WP:BODY, MOS:BODY.  Done Check for Headings and sections:  Done Check for Section templates and summary style:  Done Check for Paragraphs (MOS:PARAGRAPHS):  Done Check for Standard appendices and footers (MOS:APPENDIX):  Done Check for Order of sections (WP:ORDER):  Done Check for Works or publications:  Done Check for See also section (MOS:SEEALSO):  Done Check for Notes and references (WP:FNNR):  Done Check for Further reading (WP:FURTHER):  Done Check for External links (WP:LAYOUTEL):  Done Check for Links to sister projects:  Done Check for Navigation templates:  Done Check for Formatting:  Done Check for Images (WP:LAYIM):  Done Check for Links:  Done Check for Horizontal rule (WP:LINE):  Done

WP:WTW:

Done Check for WP:WTW:  Done Check for Words that may introduce bias:  Done Check for Puffery (WP:PEA):  Done Check for Contentious labels (WP:LABEL):  Done Check for Unsupported attributions (WP:WEASEL):  Done Check for Expressions of doubt (WP:ALLEGED):  Done Check for Editorializing (MOS:OPED):  Done Check for Synonyms for said (WP:SAY):  Done Check for Expressions that lack precision:  Done Check for Euphemisms (WP:EUPHEMISM):  Done Check for Clichés and idioms (WP:IDIOM):  Done Check for Relative time references (WP:REALTIME):  Done Check for Neologisms (WP:PEA): None Check for Offensive material (WP:F***):  Done Check for WP:MOSFICT:  Done Check for Real-world perspective (WP:Real world):  Done Check for Primary and secondary information (WP:PASI):  Done Check for Contextual presentation (MOS:PLOT):  Done

WP:EMBED:
Done Prose is preferred over list (WP:PROSE): Check for Tables (MOS:TABLES):

2: Verifiable with no original research

• a. Has an appropriate reference section: Yes
• b. Citation to reliable sources where necessary: excellent (Thorough check on Google. Cross-checked with other FAs)

WP:RS:

Done Check for WP:RS:  Done Cross-checked with other FAs: HMS Lion (1910), HMAS Australia (1911), Sovetsky Soyuz class battleship, Japanese aircraft carrier Kaga, Russian battleship Slava, Courageous class battlecruiser, SMS Goeben, HMS Indefatigable (1909)‎, Japanese aircraft carrier Hōshō, USS New Ironsides, HMS Hood (51), HMS Princess Royal (1911), HMS Eagle (1918), HMS Courageous (50), USS Arizona (BB-39), HMS New Zealand (1911), Japanese aircraft carrier Akagi, HMS Queen Mary, HMS Vanguard (23), Courageous class aircraft carrier, HMS Agincourt, HMS Hermes (95), HMS Furious (47)‎, USS Lexington (CV-2), HMS Argus (I49), HMS Tiger (1913), Russian battleship Rostislav, Fusō-class battleship, Japanese battleship Fusō, Japanese battleship Yamashiro, USS Saratoga (CV-3), Conte di Cavour-class battleship, Japanese battleship Musashi, HMS Warrior (1860), Tosa-class battleship, Japanese aircraft carrier Hiryū, Japanese aircraft carrier Shinano, Japanese battleship Mutsu, Japanese battleship Asahi, Japanese aircraft carrier Ryūjō, Russian battleship Retvizan Check for the material (WP:RSVETTING): (contentious)  Done Is it contentious?: Yes Does the ref indeed support the material?: Check for the author (WP:RSVETTING):  Done Who is the author?: Does the author have a Wikipedia article?: What are the author's academic credentials and professional experience?: What else has the author published?: Is the author, or this work, cited in other reliable sources? In academic works?: Check for the publication (WP:RSVETTING):  Done Check for Self-published sources (WP:SPS):

WP:MINREF:
Done Check for inline citations WP:MINREF:  Done Check for Direct quotations:  Done Check for Likely to be challenged:  Done Check for Contentious material about living persons (WP:BLP): NA

• c. No original research:  Done

WP:NOR:
Done Check for primary sources (WP:PRIMARY):  Done Check for synthesis (WP:SYN):  Done Check for original images (WP:OI):  Done

3: Broad in its coverage

a. Major aspects:

Done Cross-checked with other FAs: HMS Lion (1910), HMAS Australia (1911), Sovetsky Soyuz class battleship, Japanese aircraft carrier Kaga, Russian battleship Slava, Courageous class battlecruiser, SMS Goeben, HMS Indefatigable (1909)‎, Japanese aircraft carrier Hōshō, USS New Ironsides, HMS Hood (51), HMS Princess Royal (1911), HMS Eagle (1918), HMS Courageous (50), USS Arizona (BB-39), HMS New Zealand (1911), Japanese aircraft carrier Akagi, HMS Queen Mary, HMS Vanguard (23), Courageous class aircraft carrier, HMS Agincourt, HMS Hermes (95), HMS Furious (47)‎, USS Lexington (CV-2), HMS Argus (I49), HMS Tiger (1913), Russian battleship Rostislav, Fusō-class battleship, Japanese battleship Fusō, Japanese battleship Yamashiro, USS Saratoga (CV-3), Conte di Cavour-class battleship, Japanese battleship Musashi, HMS Warrior (1860), Tosa-class battleship, Japanese aircraft carrier Hiryū, Japanese aircraft carrier Shinano, Japanese battleship Mutsu, Japanese battleship Asahi, Japanese aircraft carrier Ryūjō, Russian battleship Retvizan Check for Article scope as defined by reliable sources: Check for The extent of the subject matter in these RS: Check for Out of scope: Check for The range of material that belongs in the article: Check for All material that is notable is covered: Check for All material that is referenced is covered: Check for All material that a reader would be likely to agree matches the specified scope is covered: Check for The most general scope that summarises essentially all knowledge: Check for Stay on topic and no wandering off-topic (WP:OFFTOPIC):

b. Focused:
Done Check for Readability issues (WP:LENGTH): Check for Article size (WP:TOO LONG!):

4: Neutral

WP:NPOV:

Done 4. Fair representation without bias:  Done Check for POV (WP:YESPOV):  Done Check for naming (WP:POVNAMING):  Done Check for structure (WP:STRUCTURE):  Done Check for Due and undue weight (WP:DUE):  Done Check for Balancing aspects (WP:BALASPS):  Done Check for Giving "equal validity" (WP:VALID):  Done Check for Balance (WP:YESPOV):  Done Check for Impartial tone (WP:IMPARTIAL):  Done Check for Describing aesthetic opinions (WP:SUBJECTIVE):  Done Check for Words to watch (WP:YESPOV):  Done Check for Attributing and specifying biased statements (WP:ATTRIBUTEPOV):  Done Check for Fringe theories and pseudoscience (WP:PSCI): None Check for Religion (WP:RNPOV): None

5: Stable: No edit wars, etc: Yes

6: Images  Done (PD)

Images:

Done 6: Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:  Done Check for copyright tags (WP:TAGS):  Done Check for copyright status:  Done Check for non-free content (WP:NFC):  Done Check for valid fair use rationales (WP:FUR):  Done 6: Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:  Done Check for image relevance (WP:IMAGE RELEVANCE):  Done Check for Images for the lead (WP:LEADIMAGE):  Done Check for suitable captions (WP:CAPTION):  Done

I'm glad to see your work here. I do have some insights based on the above checklist that I think will improve the article:

• I think the following statement in the lead can be improved "Her aircraft made several attacks against the German battleship Tirpitz in 1944 with only slight success and attacked targets in Norway with rather more success." (1a issue)

Besides that, I think the article looks excellent. All the best, --Seabuckthorn ♥ 14:42, 7 February 2014 (UTC)

I'm not sure what you're getting at here; do you think that the sentence would read better if they were deleted or should I try and rephrase it?--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 03:36, 8 February 2014 (UTC)

No, it should not be deleted. I was recommending something similar to "Her aircraft made several attacks against the German battleship Tirpitz in 1944 but it was more successful while attacking targets in Norway." --Seabuckthorn ♥ 03:53, 8 February 2014 (UTC)

OK, I've rewritten it; see how it reads now.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 06:39, 8 February 2014 (UTC)

Thanks! It's perfect now! --Seabuckthorn ♥ 07:30, 8 February 2014 (UTC)

Promoting the article to GA status. --Seabuckthorn ♥ 07:30, 8 February 2014 (UTC)

Great.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 07:44, 8 February 2014 (UTC)