Talk:HMS Grenade (H86)/GA1
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Reviewer: Thurgate (talk) 00:13, 1 March 2011 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- prose:
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- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- a (major aspects):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
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- It is stable.
- No edit wars etc.:
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- It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
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Comments
[edit]1. sunk by German Junkers Ju 87 dive bombers as she evacuated. Could you mention how many men were lost/injured.
- Unknown, not given in any source I have.
2. One rail and two depth charge throwers were fitted. Forgive me if this sounds dumb, but is the rail part of the depth charge or separate?
- I've reworded it to make it a little clearer. See if it works for you.
3. Exclusive of government-furnished equipment like the armament. Suggest - Excluding government-furnished equipment like the armament,
- Done.
4. the ship was briefly transferred to the Red Sea in October 1938. Suggest - the ship was then briefly transferred to the Red Sea in October 1938
- Done.
5. German Stukas. Suggest - Changing it to German Junkers Ju 87 dive bombers, or you could provide a link to it.
- Added the term to the link in the lede.
6. from her berth lest she sink there and drifted into the harbour channel. Suggest - from her berth in case she sink there and drifted into the harbour channel.
- Reworded, see how you like it. Thanks for the review.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 22:14, 1 March 2011 (UTC)
- Yer thats fine now. Thurgate (talk) 00:39, 2 March 2011 (UTC)
- Reworded, see how you like it. Thanks for the review.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 22:14, 1 March 2011 (UTC)
I've put the article on hold for seven days to allow you to address the issues I've brought up. Feel free to contact me on my talk page, or here with any concerns. Thurgate (talk) 00:13, 1 March 2011 (UTC)
Nice work Strum. Passed. Thurgate (talk) 00:39, 2 March 2011 (UTC)