Talk:HMS Glowworm (H92)/GA1
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Reviewer: Ian Rose (talk) 11:08, 5 March 2011 (UTC)
Looks interesting, should be able to complete a full review in next few days. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 11:08, 5 March 2011 (UTC)
Technical review
- No dab links.
- Not sure what value is added by the uboat.net external link.
- Legacy, but gone now.
Prose
- ...she encountered the German destroyers Z11 Bernd von Arnim and then Z18 Hans Lüdemann in the heavy fog before 08:00 a.m. -- Grammatically it looks a bit odd to have "then" where you do, given you have the descripter "German destroyers" embracing both. I assume you mean that Glowworm found one before the other but if the time difference between the two encounters wasn't too large I think you could easily lose this word -- doesn't seem vital.
- It was in sequence, albeit fairly close, so I'm happy to lose the word.
Structure
- Always prefer to see at least two subheaders under a section heading though I realise it's not simple with a mix of pre-war and early wartime stuff prior to the final battle. What if Career became Operational history and you gave the first part of the section an Early career subheader?
- Works for me.
Coverage/Referencing
- No issues.
Supporting materials
- All images appropriately licensed and captioned.
- Although not required, alt text might be worth adding.
Summary
- Pls check that I haven't unintentionally altered any meaning with my brief copyedit. Basically this looks fine but like to get response to the above points before passing. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 03:46, 12 March 2011 (UTC)
- Thanks for the review.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 04:29, 12 March 2011 (UTC)
- Cool, passing as GA -- well done. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 06:54, 12 March 2011 (UTC)
- Thanks for the review.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 04:29, 12 March 2011 (UTC)