Talk:HMS Benbow (1913)/GA1

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Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk · contribs) 21:34, 26 February 2017 (UTC)[reply]

I'll get to this shortly.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 21:34, 26 February 2017 (UTC)[reply]

One DAB, external links OK
- Will have to address that later - for some reason, the dablink checker is blocked at work.
  - {{sclass-|King George V|battleship|4||1911}} is what you're looking for, IIRC. Choose the digit for all the usual sclass- options.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 20:07, 8 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]
    - Ah, yes, missing the extra pipe. Thanks.
Images appropriately licensed. Can you find a decent one to illustrate her late- or post-war appearance?
- Nothing on the USN's site, but the IWM has this one that should be usable. Only from 1917 though.
  - Better than nothing.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 20:07, 8 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]
    - Will get to this tonight or tomorrow morning - the photo is kind of fuzzy so I might try to clean it up a bit before I upload it. Parsecboy (talk) 21:21, 8 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]
      - No rush.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 21:38, 8 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]
        Uploaded and added to the article. Parsecboy (talk) 23:10, 8 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]
No duplicate links
Work the COs into the main body.
- Done
Fix the appendicies to conform with MOS:APPENDIX
- Done, I think
Link decommissioned, scrap, displaced, main battery, funnels, secondary battery, AA guns, magazines, salvo, flying-off ramp
- Done all but flying-off ramp - do we have an article for that?
  - [[Flight deck#Early flight decks|Flying-off platforms]]
    - Thanks
The four Iron Duke-class battleships were ordered in the 1911 building programme, and were an incremental improvement over the preceding King George V class, the primary change being the substitution of a heavier secondary battery. Might be worth splitting in half.
- Done
combat loading? Howzabout deep load with a link?
- Done
one forward and one aft; of what?
- Clarified
machinery spaces What kind of machinery
- Clarified
The typical routine of gunnery drills and squadron exercises occurred in January. awkward
- See how it's worded now
Tell the reader the turret designations, so they'll be able to figure out which turrets got the flying-off platforms and watch the hyphenation
- Done
21 in (530 mm) I think you know what to do with this!
- Indeed
Which of Burt's books are you using?
- Moved the other one to Further reading
What's your source for the Xth ship of her name in the RN?
- Hadn't thought to look one up, but added now.
Watch your ampersands in the refs.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 03:24, 8 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- Fixed. Thanks again. Parsecboy (talk) 19:17, 8 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]