Talk:HMS Amazon (1795)/GA1

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Reviewer: Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk · contribs) 18:27, 21 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

I'll take a look at this shortly. Welcome back to GAN! Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk) 18:27, 21 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Hi @Pickersgill-Cunliffe:, are you still pondering over this? --Ykraps (talk) 05:13, 27 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

@Ykraps: Work constraints combined with a bad cold mean I probably won't get to this until Sunday. Apologies that I can't do it quicker. Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk) 12:00, 27 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

No Problem. --Ykraps (talk) 07:29, 28 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Prelim

Main battery is a duplicated link
Done. --Ykraps (talk) 07:51, 30 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]
Article is stable
File:Edward Pellew, 1st Viscount Exmouth by James Northcote.jpg needs US PD
Done. --Ykraps (talk) 07:51, 30 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]
Earwig reports copyvio unlikely

Lede and infobox

Suggest adding her class to the lede, e.g. "HMS Amazon was a 36-gun Amazon-class frigate..."
Done. --Ykraps (talk) 20:46, 30 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]
Include Rule's knighthood in his wikilink for consistency
Done (If you mean consistent with Sir Edward Pellew). --Ykraps (talk) 20:46, 30 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]
Suggest specifically mentioning the French Revolutionary Wars in the lede
Done. --Ykraps (talk) 20:46, 30 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]
Ibid Action of 13 January 1797
Done. --Ykraps (talk) 20:46, 30 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]
Manning & Walker p. 79 have her namesake as the Amazons, if you like
I don't appear to have that book. Do you have the full citation? --Ykraps (talk) 21:58, 30 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]
Manning, T. D.; Walker, C. F. (1959). British Warship Names. London: Putnam. OCLC 213798232.
Added. --Ykraps (talk) 20:04, 31 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]
Her commissioning date is not specifically mentioned in main text
Added. --Ykraps (talk) 21:38, 30 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]
Add her class to the "type" parameter
Added. --Ykraps (talk) 21:50, 30 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]
Suggest using template for tons burthen, e.g. 93367⁄94 (bm)
Done. --Ykraps (talk) 21:38, 30 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]
Stipulate the type of gun in the infobox
Done. --Ykraps (talk) 21:38, 30 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Construction and armament

Move 18-pounder long gun link to first mention
Done. --Ykraps (talk) 21:32, 3 November 2023 (UTC)[reply]
Sir William Rule
Done. --Ykraps (talk) 21:32, 3 November 2023 (UTC)[reply]
Suggest adding draught (Winfield has this)
Done. --Ykraps (talk) 09:22, 4 November 2023 (UTC)[reply]
Suggest not shortening "pdr"
Done. --Ykraps (talk) 09:22, 4 November 2023 (UTC)[reply]
"Amazon-class frigates" needs italics
Done. --Ykraps (talk) 21:32, 3 November 2023 (UTC)[reply]
Some of note A could be added to the main text, as it is directly relevant to the ship context
Yes, thanks, I'd been contemplating that myself. Is that enough do you think? --Ykraps (talk) 21:32, 3 November 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Service

Link commissioned
Done. --Ykraps (talk) 21:28, 4 November 2023 (UTC)[reply]
Link squadron
Done. --Ykraps (talk) 21:28, 4 November 2023 (UTC)[reply]
"the 36-gun Concorde." don't need the full stop
Yeh, don't know how that got in there. --Ykraps (talk) 21:28, 4 November 2023 (UTC)[reply]
"13 April 1796" repeated year
Removed. --Ykraps (talk) 21:28, 4 November 2023 (UTC)[reply]
"Pellew," don't need the comma
Don't know what that's doing there either. Removed. --Ykraps (talk) 21:28, 4 November 2023 (UTC)[reply]
Give Unite's gun count for consistency
Done. --Ykraps (talk) 21:47, 4 November 2023 (UTC)[reply]
"when the 40-gun"
Done. --Ykraps (talk) 21:47, 4 November 2023 (UTC)[reply]
"12 June 1796" repeated year
Done. --Ykraps (talk) 21:47, 4 November 2023 (UTC)[reply]
Ibid guns for Phoebe
Done. --Ykraps (talk) 21:47, 4 November 2023 (UTC)[reply]
"Indefatigable," don't need the comma
Sorry, can you be more precise? I can't see the instance you're referring to. --Ykraps (talk) 09:22, 5 November 2023 (UTC)[reply]
"blockading fleet"?
Yes. Done. --Ykraps (talk) 09:22, 5 November 2023 (UTC)[reply]
Any more context on Amazon's role in the attempted invasion of Ireland?
There's not a huge amount to say. Amazon had been sent to apprise John Colpoys, Admiral of the Western Squadron, so wasn't on the scene. I've added a link to the expedition and I could give a bit more background info, if you like. --Ykraps (talk) 08:27, 5 November 2023 (UTC)[reply]

My mistake, Amazon was sent to England; Phoebe was sent to Colpoys. --Ykraps (talk) 09:04, 5 November 2023 (UTC)[reply]

I've added a bit more background. See what you think. --Ykraps (talk) 20:11, 6 November 2023 (UTC)[reply]
Really need a location stipulated for the beginning of the action of 13 January 1797
Done. --Ykraps (talk) 08:27, 5 November 2023 (UTC)[reply]
"~~Captain~~ Reynolds"
Removed. --Ykraps (talk) 21:28, 4 November 2023 (UTC)[reply]

References

References look good. AGF for some print sources.

@Ykraps: Hi, that's all I have for now. Will await the last of your responses. Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk) 14:16, 4 November 2023 (UTC)[reply]

@Pickersgill-Cunliffe:, Do you have anymore comments? Thanks. --Ykraps (talk) 05:51, 8 November 2023 (UTC)[reply]

@Ykraps: Passing this article as satisfying the GA criteria. Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk) 18:46, 9 November 2023 (UTC)[reply]