Talk:Gwyneth Herbert/GA1
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Reviewer: Winner 42 (talk · contribs) 20:37, 4 July 2015 (UTC)
Beginning review, looks solid at a glance, will be done in a day or two. Winner 42 Talk to me! 20:37, 4 July 2015 (UTC)
- Just noticed that you have addressed some of these things while I was reviewing, I apologize for being too lazy to go back and check what you have fixed. Winner 42 Talk to me! 22:11, 4 July 2015 (UTC)
GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria
- Is it reasonably well written?
- Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
- A. Has an appropriate reference section:
- B. Cites reliable sources, where necessary:
- C. No original research:
- A. Has an appropriate reference section:
- Is it broad in its coverage?
- A. Major aspects:
- B. Focused (see summary style):
- A. Major aspects:
- Is it neutral?
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- Is it stable?
- No edit wars, etc:
- No edit wars, etc:
- Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
- A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
- B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
- A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
- Overall:
- Pass or Fail:
- Pass or Fail:
Overall Comments
[edit]- There are currently nine dead links in the article
- This article seems to be largely comprised of positive reviews, some negative ones should be added to provide due weight to those critics
- You need commas after introductory clauses with dates
- More images would be nice if possible, but I won't fail this if no more are available.
Sectional Analysis
[edit]- Lead
- The section seems not to summarize the points made in the article per WP:MOSLEAD and instead is largely positive quotes
- now established -> now is established
- Band
- Does this need its own section or could it be merged with career?
- The other people in the band will need to be sourced besides Dave Price
- Early life and education
- The second sentence is not in chronological order
- Noticing a bit of WP:CITEKILL here with ref 8
- Professional career
- Poland doesn't need a link
- "who was shortly to judge" Poor wording/grammar
- "This comprised mainly standards" Poor wording or jargon, can't tell what this is supposed to mean
- Other work
- These subsections don't seem to flow well, consider paragraphs?
- Some of these seem to only be sourced to primary sources, such as her appearance on Music Matters
Comments on review
[edit]Thank you for completing this review so quickly and thoroughly, Winner 42 (talk). You've given me some useful pointers for improving the article.
I've addressed most of your concerns. Specifically:
- I've sourced new references to replace most of the dead links. In a couple of cases I've simply deleted the dead link to avoid over-citation.
- I've edited the lead para, although it probably still needs further work
- I've combined the quotes about Herbert's singing style with the text on the band (which I've now referenced). I've put them into a new section called "Performance"
- I've addressed the other concerns in your sectional analysis.
I think it will be challenging to find some negative quotes about her performance. The only negative quotes I can recall seeing refer to her musical The A-Z of Mrs P, which received mixed reviews from the critics. Almost all this criticism was directed at the play rather than the music itself.
I took the picture that accompanies the article, as I couldn't find any elsewhere. It was the only one I took that is of publishable quality.
Best wishes. Headhitter (talk) 09:14, 5 July 2015 (UTC)
- Ok it looks good now. I'll go ahead and pass it. Congrats! Winner 42 Talk to me! 16:36, 5 July 2015 (UTC)