Talk:Grey foam-nest tree frog
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[edit]The largest edits I made were in the outline of the article. In some cases, headings were listed with improper names or in the wrong order. For example, the ‘Habitat’ heading (which I changed to ‘Habitat and Distribution’) was at the very end of the article rather than at the beginning. I moved around most of the headers in order to fit the one suggested by Wikipedia and make the information flow better when placed one after the other. Overall, however, the article was well-written and the information presented was relevant and properly cited throughout the article. --Anikavarsani (talk) 04:46, 18 October 2022 (UTC)
Wiki Education assignment: Behavioral Ecology 2022
[edit]This article was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment, between 30 August 2022 and 9 December 2022. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Carolinaalisio (article contribs). Peer reviewers: AnnieLiu13, Elwhoelwu, Anikavarsani.
— Assignment last updated by CalJS (talk) 01:43, 14 October 2022 (UTC)
Entry Peer Review
[edit]I removed a lot of redundant language in the entry. I removed some sentences that did not relate to the heading or did not make sense. Good addition to a start entry! just keep an eye out for syntax next time :)
Lead
Removed list of countries, replaced with southern africa I think it’s a lot for a lead section
Reworded and truncated the sentences on simultaneous polyandry and gave a description of what it is.
Made inconsistencies in naming i.e. grey nest foam frog consistent
Removed, “likely due to this feature increasing the likelihood of reproductive success and egg survival, ”because it does not properly explain what it succeeds.
Description
Replaced instances of scientific name with common name
Edited strange wording and grammar errors
Habitat and Distribution
Replaced instances of scientific name with common name
Edited strange wording and grammar errors
Removed repeated sentences
Combined paragraphs that are related in topic
Reproduction and Life Cycle
Grammar edits and improved wording
Removed adverbs
Made frog name instances consistent
Mating
Reworded sentences and removed unnecessary introductory phrases
Replaced larvae with tadpole
Unsure if the yolk has a metabolism, “which may accelerate yolk metabolism”
Removed redundant words i.e. post-hatched tadpoles
Removed gendered pronouns
Edited clunky wording
Removed redundant sentences emphasizing the frog’s use of polyandry
Removed opinions
Removed redundant words and sentences already mentioned in the entry
Replaced combatively interact with fight
Removed, “Instead, they remain on an elevated location and produce mating advertisement calls.” This does not talk about male male interactions.
Removed, “There is likely minimal combat between males due to the fact there is no advantage in being a larger male.” Circular argument
Parental Care
Grammar edits
Removed redundant language
“Some grey foam-nest tree frogs breed exclusively in water” is there a subspecies?
Removed Social Behavior heading because the information underneath is not about social behavior
Removed, “These arboreal frogs do not frequently swim or inhabit water. They are frequently found in and around human settlements where lights, water, and refuse attract many insects.” redundant
Adaptations
Grammar edits
Spelling edits
Removed redundant words e.g. their skin is integumentary resistant to
Physiology
Grammar and spelling edits
Wording edits
Removed, “Grey foam-nest tree frogs prefer to maintain moisture within their body for means of survival”
Removed, “At this point, they would survive if they were rehydrated and fed properly.” redundant Elwhoelwu (talk) 23:27, 19 October 2022 (UTC)
Peer Review
[edit]I made grammar edits and rephrased sentences throughout to improve flow and make the writing less repetitive. I deleted some sentences about foam-making that had been previously mentioned elsewhere. I moved the Physiology section up because I thought that fit better before the other sections. I also rearranged some paragraphs in the mating section to follow a more chronological order for breeding. In terms of future directions/expansion, I have a couple of proposals, depending on whether there is literature available. Information about non-breeding behavior could reestablish the Behavior section. When are they active? Where do they live? Are they social or independent creatures outside of breeding? What do they eat? For the paragraph about uric acid which was interesting, a quick elaboration on how the uric acid is formed into a solid could be interesting and useful. Under Adaptations you mention "if disturbed and forced to move..." Under what conditions does this occur? Who are the frog's enemies? Are there any human interactions? How is their habitat destroyed (in the Habitat section, last sentence could use elaboration). AnnieLiu13 (talk) 05:55, 22 October 2022 (UTC)
Peer Review
[edit]I moved the physiology section back up from what the previous peer reviewer did. Wikipedia has a suggested outline for clarity reasons and the physiology section flows best at the end as more editors contribute to the article. There were some citation errors found in the article. While I rearranged most that I had identified, there is one pressing missing citation in under the 'Adaptations' subheading that should be addressed as soon as possible in order to achieve good article status. Anikavarsani (talk) 12:18, 13 November 2022 (UTC) — Preceding unsigned comment added by 2600:6C40:0:23B:79B8:56D:21D3:4651 (talk)
Undid major layout changes, Added images, and Removed Uncited Information
[edit]I undid major changes that were made to this article that changed section separation. This undone change reverts the article back to the original format with smaller, specific sections rather than bulky, general paragraphs. Moreover, I added two images of the frog in the mating section and the adaptations section with appropriate captions for each. I removed one section of text and the header male/male interactions as it was uncited information and I could not find the original citation. I removed another section of text that gave a citation that linked an article that no longer existed. I also added a see also section, linking it to other frogs of this genus. Carolinaalisio (talk) 17:44, 8 December 2022 (UTC)
- Hi Carolinaalisio, welcome to Wikipedia editing. The changes you refer to were all to bring the article back into conformation of the accepted style of the Wikipedia Manual of Style, and the relevant WikiProject (Wikipedia:WikiProject Amphibians and Reptiles). The reasons were given in the edit summary, but I will provide more info for you here.
- The first instance of the scientific binomial is now bolded as per this Request for Comment (here). As a new standard, this is now being implemented accross the Tree of Life articles.
- Links to countries, continents, and common words such as marshes or rivers, is considered as over-linking and its use is deprecated.
- Paragraph headings only capitalize the first letter of the first word, not all the words in the heading. See Manual of Style entry here.
- The sequence of paragraphs is relatively standard across all Tree of Life articles and follows the order given in project guidelines (see here and here).
- Please revert your recent changes to amend your deviations from the project standards. If you have any additional questions, you can contact me directly on my talk page. 'Cheers, Loopy30 (talk) 20:02, 8 December 2022 (UTC)