Talk:Green Light (Lorde song)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 08:17, 24 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

is described as an → past tense
with an upbeat piano loop and the addition of hand-claps, bass and strings in the background → with an upbeat piano loop alongside hand-claps, bass and strings in its instrumentation
It has been received with → To clarify what "It" means here, replace it with "The song"
songs of the year with NME → comma before "with"

Infobox

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Background and release

Lorde teased the song on her → replace "the song" with "it" to avoid repetation
saying the "Green Light" → saying that "Green Light"
The chill, slow → The chill and slow
and noted the marked key change that occurs once the heavy piano parts appear → and noted the marked key change after the piano sequences
Top 40 songs usually have key changes that are reserved for amplified final choruses. Lorde herself realized this calling it a → Realizing that top 40 songs usually have key changes reserved for amplified final choruses, Lorde herself called "Green Light" a
of that movement" "became the way → of that movement [...] became the way

Composition and lyrical interpretation

"Green Light" is described as an → past tense
with Lorde's vocal range between → with Lorde's vocals ranging between
Then, in the first of the song's → replace "Then" with "Subsequently"
with the addition of hand-claps → featuring hand-claps

Critical reception

You need to begin this section with something like: "Green Light" generally received acclaim from music critics upon its release.
with Green Light, a comeback single → instead of putting the title in italics, put it between two '..'
wrote Lipshutz → you can leave this out; replace the preceding comma with a full stop
said of the song pulls "off all → said that the song pulls "off all
Hugh McIntyre of Forbes said, "the tune sees → Hugh McIntyre of Forbes thought, "The tune sees
awarded it Best New Track with writer → comma before "with"
Spencer Kornhaber that at first listen, the track → Spencer Kornhaber stated that at first listen, the track
of something previous recorded from Lorde but after several spins, "reveals → of Lorde's past material, but after several spins "reveals
write-up, Time editor, Sam Lansky → remove second comma

Commercial performance

Open the section with a sentece like: Commercially, "Green Light" attained success following its release
it reached the twentieth → it reached the 20th (numbers above ten should not be written out)
her second top twenty entry → her second top 20 entry
Link "Royals" here and include its release year in brackets → "Royals" (2013)
second top twenty entry in the chart → second top 20 entry on the chart
has further peaked into the top ten → has further peaked within the top ten
Canada[49], → comma goes before ref
roughly half-day of streaming and sales → remove "of"
debuting on Digital Song Sales at No. 6 → debuting at number six on Digital Song Sales
and Streaming Songs at No. 20 → and at number 20 on Streaming Songs
Lorde's third top 20 hit, followed → Lorde's third top 20 hit, preceded
Link "Team" to its respective article
performed modestly in other U.S. markets → performed modestly in other Billboard charts
landing in the top 20 → landing within the top 20
the top 10 → the top ten
Link Mainstream Top 40, Alternative Songs and Rock Airplay
It received a double platinum → It received a double Platinum
report dated 13 March 2017. It received a Platinum → report dated 13 March 2017, receiving a Platinum

Music video

The music video for "Green Light" → An accompanying music video for "Green Light"
who also shot Lorde's follow-up single → who also the visual for Lorde's follow-up single
Release year for "Perfect Places" in brackets
before the video release. The two later met → before the video's release, with the two later meeting
before there was a video concept in mind → this is not really relevant here and can be removed
Links to "16mm film" and "35mm film" are missing
as it was "magic moment" → as it was a "magic moment"
shot in a Los Angeles park called MacArthur Park → shot at the MacArthur Park in Los Angeles
She is seen wearing → During the video, ...
with the silhouettes of other goers → what are "goers"? Maybe I'm dumb, but I don't know what they are!?
inside of an taxi → inside of a taxi
Then, she opens the passenger → Subsequently, she opens the passenger
against her, as the taxi drives through the Los Angeles streets → against her as the taxi drives through the streets of Los Angeles
was previously inside. She dances while a red light beams throughout her → was previously inside, dancing while a red lights beams on her
On the pre-chorus → During the pre-chorus
from the first scene, this time with Jack Antonoff in the background, playing the piano → from the first scene along with Antonoff in the background, who plays the paino
and forth are shown. One particular shot shows her placing → and forth are shown, with one particular shot showing her placing
sunset hours, her back against a fence → I don't understand what you're trying to say here! Please revise
In this scene, Lorde removes → During the video, Lorde removes

Track listings

Only say "Track listing"

Credits and personnel

Flawless ;)

Charts

Flawless ;)

Certifications

Flawless ;)

Radio and release history

Rename the section in "Release and radio history"

Other stuff

Copy-violation

60.1% is too much! A ref is over-used! This needs to be revised...

References

As far as I checked them, the references do cover the assertations made in this article

Outcome

On hold for 7 days! This was a really interesting reading aside from some little issues here and there!! Good work! Cartoon network freak (talk) 00:07, 1 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Just fixed all the typos and used your suggestions to improve the article, including that reference that had a high violation-rate. Thank you so much for picking both of the articles I nominated so quickly. I appreciate it very much. De88 (talk) 23:11, 1 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]

@De88: Gladly passing this! Well done! Maybe you have got time to look over one of my GANs? Best; Cartoon network freak (talk) 07:38, 2 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]

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