Talk:Government of Croatia/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Wizardman (talk · contribs) 15:09, 26 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I'll review this article within 48 hours; been waiting for a review much too long. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 15:09, 26 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Here are the issues I found with the lead:

"is the main executive branch element of government in Croatia." element isn't really needed here.
"established and a head (ban) " either head or ban can be used here, both seems a bit unwieldy.

Here's the rest of my concerns:

"said that a political party forms the Government." not convinced that the italics is needed there.

Come to think of it, neither am I. Removed.--Tomobe03 (talk) 09:47, 29 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

"The Government manages the property of the Republic of Croatia unless" so no one owns any homes there? Just making sure I'm reading it right.

Uh, that came of wrong. The government manages state property unless legislation provides otherwise. There is, of course, private property and the government has nothing to do with its management. I reworded this now and wikilinked state property, hopefully clarifying situation. Could you please have another look at this now?--Tomobe03 (talk) 09:52, 29 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

"whose portfolio (area of responsibility) overlaps" the definition should be used at first use of the word rather than the second.

"acted as an administrative body governing Croatia within the Austrian Empire as a provisional government while the council existed (until 1850)." reword a bit to remove parenthesis. Also, does that mean it was only in existence three years? Noting that instead could help.

Reworded to remove the parenthesis and to stress duration of establishment of the council.--Tomobe03 (talk) 10:06, 29 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

"(of limited powers, excluding defence and foreign relations; the same was true of all preceding forms of government since the 19th century)." not sure the second part in the parentheses is needed.

No it's not contributing to the section - and it is removed now.--Tomobe03 (talk) 10:10, 29 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I'll put the article on hold and will pass when the issues are fixed. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 04:57, 29 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you very much for taking time and effort to review the article.--Tomobe03 (talk) 10:10, 29 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Everything looks good now, so I'll pass the article as a GA. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 16:21, 29 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]