Talk:Goronwy ap Tudur Hen/GA1
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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 17:33, 24 April 2016 (UTC)
Looks good. I'll review this shortly. JAGUAR 17:33, 24 April 2016 (UTC)
Initial comments
[edit]- "and Lord of Penmynydd" - link Penmynydd for accessibility
- "but retained his titles under the conquest of Wales by King Edward I of England" - it would be good to link Conquest of Wales by Edward I in this sentence
- "Around the same time, as a yeoman of the King" - king doesn't need to be capitalised
- "they were dismissed on 4 August" - which year? Is this still 1316?
- "Goronwy was interned after his death in the west wall of the Franciscan Llanfaes Friary" - shouldn't this be on the west wall?
- "and was himself the grandfather of King Henry VII of England, the founder of the Royal House" - how about {{xt|the founder of the [[House of Tudor}}?
- No dead links
- No dab links
Very minor points and suggestions, but overall nice work with this. I'll leave this on hold until they're out of the way. JAGUAR 17:44, 24 April 2016 (UTC)
- @Jaguar: Thanks for the review, I've made those changes as suggested. Just two exceptions - one was "in" the west wall, as it was literally in the wall itself is some type of antichamber, and the other was that I didn't link to House of Tudor in the founder line, only because I'd done so a few lines earlier. Miyagawa (talk) 22:14, 24 April 2016 (UTC)
- Thanks for addressing them! By all means, I'll promote this now. I thought that "in the wall" would have been correct as I knew walls could have had tunnels in them etc. JAGUAR 22:17, 24 April 2016 (UTC)