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Reviewer: Hahc21 (talk · contribs) 15:54, 14 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Review

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Background and release
  • Good.
Technicalities and synopsis
  • Good
Documentary
  • "She also explains how flying with private jet together with her team which is like "one family" is fun, but also very rare." >> "She also explains how flying in private jet with her team like "one family" is fun, but very rare"
  • "Scenes of Rihanna performing a show in Ischgl are shown. After the performance Rihanna and part of her team are out on the streets having snowball fight." Could this me merged into a single sentence?
  • "were touring for a lot of time" >> a lot of time? I think is more proffesional to say "a considerable amout of time" or similar
  • "and become very close so" >> "and became"
Critical reception
  • "giving four stars and wrote that" different tenses. Say "gave it four stars and wrote" or "giving four stars and writing"
  • "isn't going to win" The way you start the quotation makes a break on the sentence. Better to say that he wrote that "it isn't going to win"
  • "their recorded version" it may be "verisons"
  • Well. I've read the section and the prose is quite weird. I consider rewriting the entire section with a more cohesive and fluent prose.
Commercial performance
  • "before falling to number 19 for the week dated August 16, 2012." 2012?
  • "in the United States alone" if you say RIAA, you don't have to write this, as it is redundant.
  • "In Australia, Good Girl Gone Bad Live entered the Australian Music DVD Chart at its peak of number six for the issue dated June 30, 2012" 2012?
  • "The next week... The next week" Overuse of the next week here.
  • "however, it rose to number one the next week" next week is way too used. Try to use the following week or another word.

Everything else seems to be very good. — ΛΧΣ21 19:10, 28 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]