Talk:God of War (2005 video game)/GA1

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Reviewer: Hahc21 (talk · contribs) 02:53, 1 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Review

JDC, as i will be out of traveling until August 11, i won't be able to review the article i think. If you wish, you can ask another user to go and do the review for me or you can wait until i return and will do the review just arriving home. My apologies. —Hahc 21 06:05, 3 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]

DABs and Links

No DABs, No dead links. This [1] is considered suspicious by the system, and takes a lot to load, but it's Okay.

Aright.

Lead

Lead does not properly mention reception, and has nothing on film and novel.

How is the reception there now?

Novel and film added.

Better, although i'm still unconvinced on why you have to mention the entire series on the lead? You can resume it as "Due to the success of the game, several additional installments have been released on both PlayStation 3 and PSP. A novelization..."

The reason I put them there is because I was using Halo: Combat Evolved (which is FA) as an example which lists the other games.

Gameplay

"As a third-person, single-player, fixed camera game" consider writing "..single-player game with a fixed camera design", cuz writing "fixed camera game" implies that "fixed camera" may be a video game genre.

Fixed. Instead of using design, I used presentation. Is that okay?

Plot

Good

Cool

Development

We have 5 paragraphs that could easily be only two (not counting 'audio' subsection)

Now two paragraphs.

"was unique as the games' puzzles were also unique." I consider that it may be "and the game's puzles" instead of "as the game's"

I've done some rewording. How is it?

"Jaffe referenced Prince of Persia" in which way?

He was referencing the puzzles of Prince of Persia. I've reworded the beginning of that sentence so it's clearer.

You have like two or three sentences starting with "Jaffe also said/claimed/etc" I consider that you may merge them or delete the "also" word, which seems unnecessary and add nothing to the text :)

I've done some rewording. How is it now?

Great but try changing "Because the entire game is presented as a cinematic presentation," to "Because of that" as you explained in the prev sentence that you were talking about the cinematic stuff. —Hahc 21 05:37, 4 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Changed.

"Jaffe also claimed if players" >> "claimed that if..."

Fixed.

Well, this entire section talks about what Jaffe said. There is not more info about the game than what he said? Nothing about the E3 showcase? Reception from the E3 demos? Commentary from IGN? GameSpot? GameInformer? (just asking )

I've tried to find sources for development of the game, and this is what I was able to find. I'll try to find more.

Release

I merged the paragraphs as a single one

Okay.

"featuring remastered ports of both games to PlayStation 3 hardware" >> "for" instead of "to" before PlayStation.

Fixed.

Reception

"PAL Gaming Network has also praised the graphics" remove "has"

Removed.

"stating they're "superb graphics...arguably the best on the PS2."" >> what if we reword this as "PAL Gaming Network also praised what they called "superb" graphics, considering them as "arguably the best on the PS2."

Done.

"Of the little criticism the game has received" >> This may imply both POV and weasel words. It brings kid of nothing to the statement, so i recommend removing it and letting the reader reach this conclusion.

Removed.

"and also claimed it as one of the" >> "was" instead of "as"

Changed.

Awards

"The game has won over a dozen "Game of the Year Awards"" a period is missing after "Awards"

Woops lol

"the game received the award for Action Game of the Year" >> "God of War was named the Action Game of the Year"

Changed.

"The game was nominated for Game of the Year" >> "It was also..."

Changed.

"history of the PlayStation" >> "history of the console"

Changed.

"the game won various awards, including Overall Game of the Year" >> "several" instead of "various"?

Fixed.

Novel

I consider that the quote could be a little longer, but i'm not sure.

Should I check the source and make it longer? I should also see if there may be a couple more reviews.

Soudtrack

"on CD (58 minutes and 55 seconds in length)" Same as the series, you can add a {{infobox album}} for better clarity and appearance and thus no need for these details on prose. If you add the infobox, deactivate the collapsed=yes feature on the tracklist, and it seems that the words "track listing" are double-bolded, which has to be fixed.

Okay, and un-double bolded. Also, are we sure we want to remove "collapsed=yes"? It's a rather long track list (31 tracks). JDC808 (talk) 04:50, 4 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Okay no, leave it collapsed haha. I thought the infobox would be longer. —Hahc 21 05:32, 4 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Collapsed lol.

References

R#27 has no accesdate, also what does mean PALGN?

Fixed and PALGN is PAL Gaming Network

On references, you have Eurogamer and Eurogamer, while in prose you have Eurogamer. Which is correct? (keep consistency)

Fixed.

Same as series, you have SCEA and Sony Computer Entertainment of America. Better of you write "Sony Computer.... (SCEA)"

Fixed.

R#38 The Hollywood Reporter goes in italics.

Fixed.

I see IGN and IGN.com

Fixed.

R#24 has no accesdate

Fixed.

R#7 "allgame" >> "Allgame"

Fixed.

I've gone through all of the references and correctly formated each one as I recently did with God of War: Chains of Olympus.

Great! Loved references. Cheers.

Awesome. JDC808 (talk) 06:49, 4 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Verdict

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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Passed. —Hahc 21 17:36, 4 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Awesome, thanks again. JDC808 (talk) 17:42, 4 August 2012 (UTC)[reply]