Talk:Go Ahead and Break My Heart/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 20:55, 27 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]

GAN review coming soon... Best, Cartoon network freak (talk) 20:55, 27 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

from the → for the
as the second → as its second
as a digital download → for digital download
collaboration together → remove "together"
was handled → was solely handled
The concept for the song began after the pair shared similar insecurities with each other, leaving Shelton to write the first verse, followed by Stefani analyzing it and writing her own. → A concept can't began; reword it to sound like there were some sessions or such
who found → with them founding it

"with them founding it" is grammatically incorrect so I stated "with them finding it" instead

also appreciated → remove "also"
on the United States' → remove "the"
The release → The recording's release
day, on → remove comma

Background and composition

The duet → The release of the duet
notes to → notes of
expressed the → expressed that the
Shelton also expressed → He further explained
second. Shelton described → second, which Shelton described as:
Try to alternate word using for "duet"
It is a → It portrays a
"don't gush about their relationship in the press too much, as they try to keep some semblance of privacy. Instead, they wrote a song about it." → "[didn't] gush about their relationship in the press too much, as they [tried] to keep some semblance of privacy. Instead, they wrote a song about it."
Stefani sings about her → The lyrics of the recording delve on Stefani's
the two met → the two artists met

Critical reception

well received → well-received
hitsville" and thanking → hitsville", with her thanking
also thought → remove "also"
stating Stefani → stating that Stefani
remove "and concluded by"
selected the track → selected the recording
stating "as → stating that

Chart performance

debut, behind → remove comma
The song has sold → The track has sold (you repeat "song" twice)
in the US → in America

Live performances

sang it again → sang it additionally

Outcome

I've put this article On hold for 7 days. Good luck with editing and best, Cartoon network freak (talk) 18:29, 28 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Cartoon network freak: Thanks. I believe I completed everything. Carbrera (talk) 20:12, 28 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Gladly passing. Best, Cartoon network freak (talk) 20:42, 28 August 2016 (UTC)[reply]

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