Talk:Glow in the Dark Tour/GA1

GA Review

Passed. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 23:13, 2 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

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Nominator: Kyle Peake (talk · contribs) 21:37, 3 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 17:10, 2 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable, as shown by a source spot-check. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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It's been a while, so take a fresh look at this and make the suggested changes too. Also found the author for the Financial Times review. Ping when addressed. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 17:37, 2 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Did you know? If you fancy doing so, I always have plenty of GA nominees to review. Just look for the all-uppercase titles in the Television section. Reviews always appreciated.

Copy changes

Lead and infobox

Ditch the small font in the infobox for dates/countries. MOS:SMALLFONT
in his book, Glow in the Dark (2009) Unnecessary comma in this context

Background

The first show was supposed to be a two-night concert at Hammersmith Apollo in London, until West moved it to the city's O2 Arena on the night of November 22, 2007, as a result of heavy demand. Remove comma after London
Devlin had previously handled the design for West's Touch the Sky Tour (2005–06), a role he later served for the Watch the Throne Tour (2011–12) and The Yeezus Tour (2013–14). Try rewording as Devlin had previously handled the design for West's Touch the Sky Tour (2005–06) and later served in that role for the Watch the Throne Tour (2011–12) and The Yeezus Tour (2013–14).
Las Vegas, Nevada and Albuquerque, New Mexico during use your MOS:GEOCOMMAs: Las Vegas, Nevada, and Albuquerque, New Mexico, during
Hyphenate "30-minute" to match "90-minute"

Marketing

dubbed as "The Glow in the Dark Tour Ignited by Absolut 100" No need for "as" in this construction.

Tour controversies

Fix time formats: should be 3:30 a.m., 4:25 a.m.
- Be consistent: this section also has "1am" and "2am".
Consider reflowing paragraph breaks so Bonnaroo is its own paragraph. Sacramento, Bonnaroo, Newcastle.

Tour dates

There is no header in the 2008 list for Notes, though several entries have notes.

Sourcing and spot checks

Reviewed: 1, 10, 25, 38, 39, 46

[1] is a dead link. The new link is https://www.billboard.com/music/music-news/lil-wayne-2008-2009-tours-gross-42-million-267462/
[25] should be credited in-reference and in-text to Richard Clayton per the ProQuest version of this article.

Images

The poster has a valid NFUR. The other images are all CC-licensed with appropriate captions and alt text. I'd suggest making the alt for the "female alien" one more descriptive than the current alt and maybe moving the two left-aligned images (aside from the Child Rebel Soldier collage) to right-align.

@Sammi Brie: I have implemented all of the fixes, apart from a few I'd like to go over. I placed a comma after book in the lead since this is often done when introducing works there such as the Graduation album, I don't agree with removal of the comma after London since until is best suited a comma before and the images work better with the alignment changing in my opinion. --K. Peake 21:38, 2 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

Alright, I won't beef too hard on minor or non-MOS matters. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 23:12, 2 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.