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- 3 dead links, and some links are redirects. I highly suggest you to archive your urls to avoid this.
- You are relying in too many quotes [1]
- Infobox
- "No Reptiles" is not mentioned in the article, and it is unsourced.
- Lead
- "number seven on the United Kingdom Albums Chart, and at number 29 on..." -> Per WP:NUMNOTES, you shouldn't be mixing them.
- You utilized "the album" 6 times in the lead alone.
- "22 June 2015 on RCA Records.[4]" -> You don't need a source for this (in the lead).
- Recording and production
- "alone and isolated" -> original quote says "We just wanted to be away and isolated."
- Higgs told -> Who is Higgs.
- "we kind of ripped up that rule book after realizing," -> "we kind of ripped up that rule book after reali[s]ing" (consistent with the British English you are using).
- Pritchard told -> Who is Pritchard.
- "Jeremy Pritchard said that these "affected us pretty adversely" -> "affected [them]".
- In this section you say "the band" 10 times, "they" 3 times, "The group" 1 time, "Everything Everything" 0 times, and other options 0 times as well.
- second album Arc. -> second album Arc (2013).
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- This is done in any kind of articles (not only musical ones), in and outside Wikipedia. You have to give context to readers as they not necessarily know everything you are talking about (you have to give context). You also have to consider readers not always click on the links (because they don't want to or they cannot do it), or that these articles can be printed, be part of the CD/DVD selection, or be part of the Wikipedia's board game, so that additional context is excluded. If you don't want to use "(year)", you can say it on text, ("released in 2000", "2000's"), etc.© Tbhotch™ (en-2.5). 18:26, 17 September 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- "Pritchard told Skiddle" and "During recording sessions" paragraphs are too short.
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- There is no official guideline for WP:Paragraphs other than that link, and if you Google the rules there are no definitive rules for the length. However, it is suggested to have coherence when building a paragraph and they have to remain focused in one idea. In this section you have 5 paragraphs: Paragraph 1 gives the background of Get to Heaven; Paragraph 2 still about the background, but discusses why it was recorded; Paragraph 3 is about what Paragraph 2 is talking about; Paragraph 4 is about the record production; Paragraph 5 is about Higgs "depression". So after this revision, Paragraph 3 is the one that has to be merged with Paragraph 2. © Tbhotch™ (en-2.5). 18:26, 17 September 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- Composition
- "the lyrics are and our sound". -> [their]
- "In March," -> {{when?}}
- "The band" is used 6 times here.
- "Speaking to The Independent, Higgs spoke"
- the Islamic State of Iraq and the Levant -> the Islamic State of Iraq and the Levant (ISIL)
- "current affairs of 2015" -> Articles are written in an historical perspective.
- Higgs told Digital Spy that: "Quotation"[8] -> that quote is not in the source given.
- "Frankie Teardrop" -> "Frankie Teardrop" (1977)
- Kid A -> Kid A (2000)
- "Higgs told the NME that Kanye West's" paragraph is too short.
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- Okay, I folded it into the previous paragraph; this subsection talks about lyrics and not the music, so it wouldn't fit into the same para as the musical influences. — fox 23:28, 17 September 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- Promotion and release
- In November -> {{when?}}
- The paragraphs "The album was released on 22 June" and "The album was released" should be merged.
- The image should be at the top of the section.
- I suggest to have an order here, you go from Single 1 on 17 February to Single 2 on 9 April, then album initial release on 14 February.
- I've had a go at fixing this by moving the text around. (Note that the February 14 date refers to when the band announced the release date; it is not itself the release date). — fox 08:50, 17 September 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- Sony RCA -> Isn't "Sony's RCA"?
- "Its title, Higgs told Drowned in Sound, was almost" sounds weird
- References 39 and 40 are the same.
- Charts
- Remove ""X" denotes song not released in a particular country." and ""=" denotes track not eligible for a particular chart.", you aren't using them.
- Critical reception
- Link Q (magazine)
- Merge "Much was said about" paragraph.
- Same for "The album was among the favourites" or expand it.
- Commercial performance
- "Get to Heaven entered the UK Albums Chart at number seven.[61][62]" That's it?
- There isn't much more information available about the commercial success of the album; I can dig for more tomorrow, or just fold this section into the previous one. — fox 08:50, 17 September 2017 (UTC)[reply]
- Track listing
- "A gatefold vinyl edition of the album was distributed in the UK by RCA Records, featuring the same track listing as the standard edition of the album." is unsourced.
- Who is/are the writer(s)?
- References
- 4 (NME): "nme.com." -> NME is italicised, nme.com. not
- 9 (NME): "nme.com.".
- 16 (Financial Times): |subscription=yes
- 23 (The Guardian): ". the Guardian"
- 26 (BBC Radio): BBC is not italicised.
- 27 (NME). NME is overlinked
- 29 (Digital Spy). Digital Spy is overlinked.
- 31 (gigwise.com): gigwise.com is not italicised.
- 32 (www.brightonsfinest.com): www.brightonsfinest.com is not italicised.
- 34 ([V] music): Link it to Channel V.
- 36 (Under the Radar): Link it to Under the Radar (magazine)
- 37 (NME). NME is overlinked.
- 38: (The Bristol Post). Link it to Bristol Post.
- 43: (ClashMusic.com). Link it to Clash (magazine)
- 46 (NME): "NME".
- 47 (Pitchfork Media): Link it to Pitchfork (website)
- 48 (The Daily Telegraph). Author is missing. Also The Daily Telegraph is italicised and linked.
- 49 (Metacritic): Source 41 and 49 are the same.
- 50 (Q): It is missing many things.
- 53 (DIY): DIY is overlinked.
- 54 (Digital Spy): "Digital Spy"
- 57 (The Guardian): ". the Guardian"
- 60 (BBC News): BBC News is not italicised.
- 65 (AIRA): Link it to Australian Recording Industry Association.
- 67 (OCC): Official Charts Company is overlinked.
- You have an inconsistent use of "Publisher" and "Publisher.com", choose one.
- Lead
- The lead is too short and it currently looks unorganized (Recorded -> release -> charts -> singles -> composition -> reception).
- Recording and production
- "battled with depression" -> "existential crisis" is what Higgs said.
- Most of the recording studios listed in the infobox are not mentioned here.
- Composition
- Indie pop art pop are mentioned in the infobox, but not here, why?
- References
- 30 (thefourohfive.com): Publisher is missing.
- Categories
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