Talk:George Floyd (American football)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 19:53, 9 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

"Floyd appeared in ten games during the Jets' 1982 season, including three playoff games, and eight in their 1984 season, with two games started." - repetition of "games"
- Cut last instance. Therapyisgood (talk) 17:36, 10 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"After a knee injury in the 1985 NFL preseason, Floyd retired." - possibly better Floyd retired after sustaining a knee injury in the 1985 NFL preseason.
- Changed. Therapyisgood (talk) 17:36, 10 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"In 1999, he was inducted into the College Football Hall of Fame; in 2007, he was inducted into EKU's Hall of Fame, and, in 2011, he was inducted into Hernando High School's Hall of Fame." - too many uses of the term "he was inducted into the"; try something different that doesn't lose meaning if possible
- Rewrote. Therapyisgood (talk) 17:36, 10 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Wikilink Hernando High School and college football
- Linked. Therapyisgood (talk) 17:39, 10 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"He tied for the team lead with three interceptions and finished with 84 tackles, third-most on the team," - repetition of "team"
- Changed. Therapyisgood (talk) 17:41, 10 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

"and lead the conference with thirteen punt returns and seven interceptions." - typo; should be led
- Changed this and another instance. Therapyisgood (talk) 18:00, 10 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"In Floyd's sophomore year, he had a three-interception game against Austin Peay in a 35–10 EKU victory in September, and, in a game against Jackson State in November," - repetition of "game"
- Changed. Therapyisgood (talk) 18:00, 10 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"Floyd won OVC DPOW for his performance in an October 24th game" - October 24 per MOS:DATESNO
- Changed. Therapyisgood (talk) 18:00, 10 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"Floyd returned seventeen punts for 142 yards." - should be 17 per MOS:NUMBERS
- Changed. Therapyisgood (talk) 18:00, 10 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"returned thirty-six punts for 314 yards and a touchdown." - same issue as above
- Changed. Therapyisgood (talk) 18:00, 10 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"After the season, he made the GC all-conference team and the TTT all-area team." - repetition of "team"
- Changed. Therapyisgood (talk) 18:00, 10 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"In 1999, Floyd was inducted into the College Football Hall of Fame, and, in 2007, he was inducted into EKU's Hall of Fame." - repetition of the phrase "was inducted into"
- Changed. Therapyisgood (talk) 18:09, 10 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Each of the three mentions of New York Daily News need to be fully italized
- I'm following our article on New York Daily News on italicization. Therapyisgood (talk) 18:07, 10 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Wikilink the term kickoff returner to the correct article
- Linked. Therapyisgood (talk) 18:19, 10 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"Floyd saw "limited action"" - according to whom?
- Added. Therapyisgood (talk) 18:19, 10 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
" Floyd recovered a fumble and made a few "All-Pro hits"" - same issue as above
- There is no author listed so I just say according to an article in the TTT. Therapyisgood (talk) 18:19, 10 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

"As a junior in high school, Floyd wanted to join the Army." - perhaps add why he did not join the army
- Source doesn't say, unfortunately. Therapyisgood (talk) 18:04, 10 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"He married Cheryl Johnson in March 1983." - who is Cheryl Johnson?
- His wife, presumably. Therapyisgood (talk) 18:04, 10 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  - I will take that there no further information available on Johnson MWright96 (talk) 11:49, 11 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

All the newspaper sources that came from Newspapers.com should be stated as such using the via= field
- Changed. Therapyisgood (talk) 19:39, 10 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
All newspapers mentioning they got their stories from the Associated Press should be stated as such with the agency= field
The hyphen in Reference 34 "Boise State's Comeback Shocks Eastern 31-29 in Camellia Bowl" - should be replaced by an en dash per MOS:DASH
- Changed. Therapyisgood (talk) 18:30, 10 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Reference 47 "Eastern's Mistakes Lead to 34-23 Loss in I-AA Title Game (cont'd)" - same issue as above
- Changed. Therapyisgood (talk) 18:30, 10 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Reference 87 is missing the accessdate
- Added. Therapyisgood (talk) 18:30, 10 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Will put the review on hold to allow the nominator to address or query each of the points raised above MWright96 (talk) 10:39, 10 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]