Talk:Ganesha Temple, Morgaon/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: –– Jezhotwells (talk) 14:44, 6 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I shall be reviewing this article against the Good Article criteria, following its nomination for Good Article status.

Checking against GA criteria

GA review (see here for criteria)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS):
''He was warned that he could drink from the bowl as long as it was intact so to protect the bowl, but swallowed it. ? unclear Not done

Sindhu was given the ever-full bowl of amrita (elixir of life) as a boon from the Sun-god. Sindhu was warned that he could drink from the bowl as long as it was intact. So to protect the bowl, he swallowed it. Sindhu terrorized the three worlds, so the gods asked Gunesha for help. We now have three sentences starting "Sindhu". This is very poor prose. Done

All the deities together called upon the sacred Turiya Tirtha river, in which Brahma bathed to cleanse his sin. Unclear Done

''Currently, the temple is under the administration of the Chinchwad Devasthan Trust (lit. "Chinchwad temple trust") Why is the trust title repeated in brackets? Done

I made a number of copy-edits and minor fixes.[1] Please get articles checked over and copy-edited before bringing them to WP:GAN

He was born to Shiva and Parvati in the Treta yuga, for the purpose of killing the demon Sindhu. Sindhu was born as a child of the king of Mithila, Cakrapani, and his wife Ugrā. Ugrā conceived due to the power of a solar mantra, but was unable to bear the extreme heat radiating from the foetus, so she abandoned it in the ocean. The latter part of this is not clear at at all. What is the it, referred to? Please rewrite the entire passage in clear English.
"It" refers to the foetus. There is no other object in the sentence that "it" can refer to. --Redtigerxyz ^Talk 12:29, 7 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

~~:OK, so Sindhu is nothing to do with foetus? he is a nother child. Please make all of this crystal clear.~~
OK< you gave just enoughy to go on. I have converted that into better English now. please get someone with a good command of English t5o copy-edit before submitting other artciles to WP:GAN in future. –– Jezhotwells (talk) 13:01, 8 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
Referencing checks out
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

OK, on hold for seven days for the issues above to be fixed. –– Jezhotwells (talk) 15:25, 6 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]
OK, this just about squeaks through as reasonable prose, but I recommend that you get a full copy-edit as soon as possible. I am listing for GA status. –– Jezhotwells (talk) 13:01, 8 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Have fixed the prose problems. --Redtigerxyz ^Talk 16:05, 6 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

WEll two bits have been fixed. Problems remain. –– Jezhotwells (talk) 22:32, 6 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]