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Reviewer: Peacemaker67 (talk · contribs) 10:26, 29 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]


This article is in good shape. A few comments:

  • I assume he was a Generalleutnant, suggest linking it  Done
  • suggest "Mad Margrave" consistently throughout rather than a mix of italics and scare quotes
  • suggest linking subaltern  Done
  • suggest choosing Pour le Merite or Pour le Mérite and keeping it consistent, including in the infobox
  • suggest Seydlitz was born on 3 February 1721, in Kalkar in the Duchy of Cleves, where his father was stationed. His father, Daniel Florian Seydlitz, was a major of Prussian cavalry with the Curassier Regiment Markgraf Friedrich Wilhelm of Brandenburg-Schwedt No. 5. The "Curassier Regiment" should probably have initial caps, as it appears to be the proper name of the Regiment.  Done
  • there is a space before Note 2  Done
  • repetition re apt and aptly. Suggest "well" for the latter  Done
  • there is an inconsistency about the Markgraf's given name, in the unit title he is Wilhelm, when introduced he is William
  • suggest and a nephew otherwise it is a bit confusing about who the nephew was
  • if the Old Dessauer isn't mentioned again, suggest deleting mention of his nickname, it doesn't seem to add anything
  • "Mad" Margrave should probably be "Mad Margrave" if that is what he was called
  • link horsemanship at first mention  Done
  • as a page to the Mad Margrave should probably be as a page to the Margrave, as it is currently a little too informal  Done
  • consistency with Cürassier and Curassier, and link at first mention  Done
  • perhaps explicitly point out that he was appointed as a cornet in his father's old regiment rather than use an abbreviated unit title  Done but earlier in the paragraph also mentions that this was his father's old regiment. Now it's mentioned twice' isn't that a bit overkill?
  • suggest Several times Seydlitz came to the notice of the King  Done
  • the Prussian line
  • link Habsburg monarchy at the first mention of Austrian  Done
  • cuirassier and coup d'œil are overlinked
  • link hussars at first mention  Done
  • should Count Nassau be redlinked? Or would be not be notable?
  • suggest Seydlitz served through the Second Silesian War as you have just talked about another man
  • there are two mentions of his promotion to major, suggest linking major and combining them  Done
  • should Count Burghausen be redlinked? Not clear who it is, so took it out
  • suggest He developed tactics for cavalry that included hussars, cuirassiers and dragoons, and presented them to the King. or something similar  Done
  • suggest They had to be capable  Done
  • suggest and be prepared  Done
  • suggest with accuracy or reloaded  Done
  • suggest pattern for the rest  Done
  • where they regrouped  Done
  • At the Prussian debacle and on 14 October 1758 same with the next date  Done
  • in the Berlin Done
  • it isn't clear what happen to his health "undermined by his experience with the Margrave"? syphilis removed, mentioned later.  Done
  • and was divorced needs a full stop  Done
  • His early biographer  Done
  • but his biographer Bernhard Poten  Done
  • in Berlin , honoring needs a space dropped  Done
  • the Memorials section should probably be rolled into one para  Done
  • the licensing of File:Friedrich wilhelm von seydlitz.jpg needs work, File:Major General von Seydlitz pipe Prussian cavalry Battle of Rossbach Richard Knötel.jpg needs a PD-US tag, as does File:Seydlitz at Rossbach.jpg
these are fixed. I swapped out the one in the info box for one with better attributes. auntieruth (talk) 18:57, 1 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]
File:FriedrichWilhelmvonSeydlitz.jpg needs a PD-US tag, as does File:1872 Lulves Standbild Generals von Seydlitz anagoria.JPG. Cheers, Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 01:51, 2 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]
  • there is an unclosed pair of square brackets in the infobox  Done

That's me done. Placing on hold for comments to be addressed. Cheers, Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 07:20, 1 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Ok, all good now, passing. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 01:42, 6 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]