Talk:Friedrich Wilhelm von Seydlitz/GA1

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Reviewer: Peacemaker67 (talk · contribs) 10:26, 29 April 2017 (UTC)[reply]

This article is in good shape. A few comments:

I assume he was a Generalleutnant, suggest linking it Done
suggest "Mad Margrave" consistently throughout rather than a mix of italics and scare quotes
suggest linking subaltern Done
suggest choosing Pour le Merite or Pour le Mérite and keeping it consistent, including in the infobox
suggest Seydlitz was born on 3 February 1721, in Kalkar in the Duchy of Cleves, where his father was stationed. His father, Daniel Florian Seydlitz, was a major of Prussian cavalry with the Curassier Regiment Markgraf Friedrich Wilhelm of Brandenburg-Schwedt No. 5. The "Curassier Regiment" should probably have initial caps, as it appears to be the proper name of the Regiment. Done
there is a space before Note 2 Done
repetition re apt and aptly. Suggest "well" for the latter Done
there is an inconsistency about the Markgraf's given name, in the unit title he is Wilhelm, when introduced he is William
suggest and a nephew otherwise it is a bit confusing about who the nephew was
if the Old Dessauer isn't mentioned again, suggest deleting mention of his nickname, it doesn't seem to add anything
"Mad" Margrave should probably be "Mad Margrave" if that is what he was called
link horsemanship at first mention Done
as a page to the Mad Margrave should probably be as a page to the Margrave, as it is currently a little too informal Done
consistency with Cürassier and Curassier, and link at first mention Done
perhaps explicitly point out that he was appointed as a cornet in his father's old regiment rather than use an abbreviated unit title Done but earlier in the paragraph also mentions that this was his father's old regiment. Now it's mentioned twice' isn't that a bit overkill?
suggest Several times Seydlitz came to the notice of the King Done
the Prussian line
link Habsburg monarchy at the first mention of Austrian Done
cuirassier and coup d'œil are overlinked
link hussars at first mention Done
should Count Nassau be redlinked? Or would be not be notable?
suggest Seydlitz served through the Second Silesian War as you have just talked about another man
there are two mentions of his promotion to major, suggest linking major and combining them Done
should Count Burghausen be redlinked? Not clear who it is, so took it out
suggest He developed tactics for cavalry that included hussars, cuirassiers and dragoons, and presented them to the King. or something similar Done
suggest They had to be capable Done
suggest and be prepared Done
suggest with accuracy or reloaded Done
suggest pattern for the rest Done
where they regrouped Done
At the Prussian debacle and on 14 October 1758 same with the next date Done
in ~~the~~ Berlin Done
it isn't clear what happen to his health "undermined by his experience with the Margrave"? syphilis removed, mentioned later. Done
and was divorced needs a full stop Done
His early biographer Done
but his biographer Bernhard Poten Done
in Berlin , honoring needs a space dropped Done
the Memorials section should probably be rolled into one para Done
the licensing of File:Friedrich wilhelm von seydlitz.jpg needs work, File:Major General von Seydlitz pipe Prussian cavalry Battle of Rossbach Richard Knötel.jpg needs a PD-US tag, as does File:Seydlitz at Rossbach.jpg

these are fixed. I swapped out the one in the info box for one with better attributes. auntieruth (talk) 18:57, 1 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]

File:FriedrichWilhelmvonSeydlitz.jpg needs a PD-US tag, as does File:1872 Lulves Standbild Generals von Seydlitz anagoria.JPG. Cheers, Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 01:51, 2 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]

there is an unclosed pair of square brackets in the infobox Done

That's me done. Placing on hold for comments to be addressed. Cheers, Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 07:20, 1 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you. @Peacemaker67: Comments addressed I think. I added a mite on family. auntieruth (talk) 18:57, 1 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]

auntieruth - just the two US-PD tags (above) to do. Cheers, Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 01:57, 3 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]

@Peacemaker67: they are already there. PD-old-auto-1923|1815 shows up as public domain in US auntieruth (talk) 22:40, 3 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]

I thought PD-old was insufficient, a separate PD-US tag is needed, is it not? That is what the template indicates. Perhaps Nikkimaria can advise. Cheers, Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 23:55, 3 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]

{{PD-old-auto-1923}} provides a US PD tag automatically, but the two images flagged above on 2 May do not use that tag - they should if it applies, or another US PD tag if it does not. Nikkimaria (talk) 00:27, 4 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]
I had already used PD-old-auto-1923|1815}} and PD-old-auto-1923|1814}} on the images, which should have sufficed, right? I added the tag Nikkimaria gave too, but it simply gives the same text, but not as much detail. anyway, it's done. Nikkimaria and Peacemaker67, please advise.... auntieruth (talk) 14:23, 4 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Is it possible we're not talking about the same images? I'm looking at File:FriedrichWilhelmvonSeydlitz.jpg and File:1872_Lulves_Standbild_Generals_von_Seydlitz_anagoria.JPG, both of which have only PD-old. Nikkimaria (talk) 00:25, 5 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]
LOL, of course different files. PD-old-auto-1923|creator's death added to both of those auntieruth (talk) 14:24, 5 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Ok, all good now, passing. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 01:42, 6 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]