Talk:French cruiser D'Entrecasteaux/GA1

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Reviewer: Peacemaker67 (talk · contribs) 00:05, 18 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]

This article is in good shape. A few comments:

Lead and infobox

suggest adding |infobox caption=D'Entrecasteaux to Infobox ship begin to put the ship name at the top of the infobox
- Done
"The spent much of the war"
- Fixed
"including the supporting Arab rebels"
- Fixed
the length, beam, draft, installed power, number of 47 mm and 37 mm guns, and various armour thicknesses don't match the body
- Don't think I remembered to overhaul the box...
you could add the range
- Good idea
rounding error in the conversion of the 138 mm guns
- Fixed

Body

no first names for Rear Admirals de Courejolles, Bayle, Sourrieu and de Spitz?
- Can't find de Courejolles, but I got the others (this was helpful, but de Courejolles appears to have retired before the war)
mention the Eight-Nation Alliance, perhaps pipe link to "colonialist response"
- Added
"The ship spent the next four two in the region"
- Fixed
"In early 1914, the Nnavy"
- Done
"to replace ~~the armored cruiser~~ Pothuau"
- Done
"along with Pothuau and the old pre-dreadnought battleships Jauréguiberry and Charlemagne." to avoid confusion
- Done
"the protected cruiser Du Chayla"
- Done
say the Armée d'Orient fought on the Macedonian front
- Good idea
link Reserve fleet
- Done
suggest "when the Belgians returned her due to significant reductions in their naval budget."
- Works for me
suggest "In the early 1920s, the Polish Navy had explored the possibility of buying a cruiser from France to strengthen their nascent fleet"
- Done
"renamed her Bałtyk on 17 September 1927 as a result of the growing influence of royalist elements in the Polish parliament" doesn't really make sense, if royalist elements were growing in influence, wouldn't they want to retain a royal name on a ship?
- I questioned that as well; it was in the previous version of the article. I wonder if it was a translation issue? Perhaps for the best to just remove that bit.
is there an OCLC or ISSN for Twardowski?
- Added
the Further reading book needs the ISBN hyphenated
- Done

That's all I could find. Placing on hold for the above to be addressed. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 03:18, 18 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks as always! Parsecboy (talk) 00:41, 20 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]

No worries. This article is well-written, verifiable using reliable sources, covers the subject well, is neutral and stable, contains no plagiarism, and is illustrated by acceptably licensed images with appropriate captions. Passing. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 03:46, 20 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]