Talk:French cruiser Aréthuse

GA Review

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Reviewer: Hog Farm (talk · contribs) 03:28, 13 January 2021 (UTC)

• Maybe include the year the ship was commissioned in the lead?
  • Good idea
• "Eight of the secondary guns were removed and the remaining sixteen guns were kept in the broadside battery." - I'm probably misunderstanding something here, but "the secondary guns" is referring to the secondary battery of 22x 140mm guns, right? But 16 + 8 = 24, so did the ship pick up two more of the 140mm at some point then?
  • Apparently I can't do math ;)
• "and secured an arrangement where either side would fire on the other without having been shot at first" - Based on the source, this should read neither, not either.
  • Fixed
• "and used as the headquarters for the Defense Mobile based in Landévennec" - You refer to Defense Mobile as the coastal defense unit in the lead, can you include that gloss here, as well? "Defense Mobile" is gonna be pretty meaningless to most readers without a brief gloss.
  • Good point
• Sources all appear to be reliable
• Is there a specific reason one of the sources cited as Brassey 1888a, when there's only one Brassey 1888 source?
  • The citation was copied from an article that cited two different articles from that year, and I didn't catch it here
• Images are relevant and appropriately licensed

Good work on this one, placing on hold. Hog Farm _Bacon 04:10, 13 January 2021 (UTC)

Thanks! Parsecboy (talk) 13:04, 13 January 2021 (UTC)