Talk:Franz Choque/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: An anonymous username, not my real name (talk · contribs) 21:05, 13 November 2022 (UTC)[reply]

I will look into this. An anonymous username, not my real name (talk) 21:05, 13 November 2022 (UTC)[reply]

The term "Oruro prefecture" is used, but the word "district" would be better, as that is its official name.

'Prefecture' here refers not to an administrative division but to an institution. Bolivia's nine departments were headed by a prefect until 2010, so 'Oruro Prefecture' would be equivalent to 'Oruro Governor's Office' today. I have capitalized it now, though. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 21:50, 13 November 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Of Aymara descent, Franz Choque was born on 26 August 1969 in Inquisivi, a rural locale situated in La Paz's tropical Yungas region. Perhaps say "Franz Choque was born on 26 August 1969 in Inquisivi to a family of Aymara descent...".

Reworded accordingly though not exactly. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 21:50, 13 November 2022 (UTC)[reply]

He has four brothers, according to one of the sources, who you could mention.

Perhaps if they were more individually notable or at least had names or stated professions. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 21:50, 13 November 2022 (UTC)[reply]

If you don't want a redlink in your article I completely understand, but you could add one for "University of Aquinas". Again, you don't have to.

My typical barometer for whether to insert a red link depends on whether there's at least a Spanish equivalent article. 21:50, 13 November 2022 (UTC)

The term "Orureño" might confuse readers, since it's only used once.

Changed to just Oruro. Krisgabwoosh (talk) 21:50, 13 November 2022 (UTC)[reply]

the Supreme Electoral Tribunal opted to take into account UD's victory in Oruro's special ingenious circumscription in its calculations Did you mean "indigenous"?

Dang autocorrect. Good catch! 21:50, 13 November 2022 (UTC)

as though it was using State resources "State" should probably be lowercase.

Done Krisgabwoosh (talk) 21:50, 13 November 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Good coverage, good image, etc.; the only issues I can find are very minor. I'm putting it on hold. An anonymous username, not my real name (talk) 21:32, 13 November 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Great job getting to everything so fast. It all looks good now. I will pass it. An anonymous username, not my real name (talk) 22:09, 13 November 2022 (UTC)[reply]

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