Talk:Frank Worsley/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk · contribs) 18:10, 7 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I'll get to this shortly.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 18:10, 7 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

The proper designation of his P-boat was PC.61. PQ was only an informal name.
Hyphens in 13-year-old.
No "the" on the HMS Sparrow or HMS Pangloss
Link torpedo(es), monitor
What does this mean? The fortuitous weather on the day of departure from the island meant that he was able to ensure that his chronometer was rated.
Take out the hyphen by removing the |adj=on from the template 22-foot (6.7 m)
What does this mean? Tugboat? tug steamer
What kind of ship was Pangloss?
Change skippered to commanded.
along British coast "the" coast
Add hyphen diesel engined and 15 man
typo propellor--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 00:58, 12 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
No DABs, external links good, pics appropriately licensed.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 01:26, 12 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Many thanks for the review, I think I have addressed all the points noted above. Zawed (talk) 09:24, 12 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Be sure to use PC.61, the period between them matters. Also you're using the ship's name far too often in close conjunction. I normally use a mixture of the name, "she" and "the ship" in rotation to keep from numbing repetition. And add a hyphen for compound adjectives like "steel hulled".--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 15:06, 12 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Revised some more. Hopefully it is satisfactory now. Zawed (talk) 01:22, 13 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]