Talk:Frank Fitzgerald (American football)/GA1
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Nominator: BeanieFan11 (talk · contribs) 19:16, 23 August 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: WikiOriginal-9 (talk · contribs) 19:54, 23 August 2024 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (reference section):
b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
- a (reference section):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- a (major aspects):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- Pass/Fail:
- Added GM cat.
- Added WW2 cat.
- "was an American football executive" should we change that to "was an American professional football executive"
- Lowercase draft in the lead and body I guess.
- "later renamed to the Tennessee Titans". Change to "now known as the Tennessee Titans" so as not to repeat "later" twice in one sentence.
- "That year, the team compiled a record of 3–9" Change the team to "the Yanks". "the team" was getting a little repetitive.
- "executive with the Houston Oilers (later Tennessee Oilers / Titans" Change to "now known as the Tennessee Titans".
- "the person who announced the team's NFL Draft selections to league officials" That makes it sound like he was on TV or something. I don't think he was though? Suggest changing to "gave the team's NFL draft selections to league officials" That part in the lead might need revising also to make it less confusing.
I think that's everything. ~WikiOriginal-9~ (talk) 19:54, 23 August 2024 (UTC)
- @WikiOriginal-9: Addressed almost everything. Any idea of a good way to reword the draft part in the lead? BeanieFan11 (talk) 22:47, 23 August 2024 (UTC)
- I can't really think of anything, maybe we need to invent a new word... ~WikiOriginal-9~ (talk) 22:55, 23 August 2024 (UTC)
- Maybe something like, "He later worked in the radio business and for the NFL draft department of the Houston Oilers, now known as the Tennessee Titans"? BeanieFan11 (talk) 23:01, 23 August 2024 (UTC)
- That's perfect. Nice. ~WikiOriginal-9~ (talk) 23:04, 23 August 2024 (UTC)
- Changed the wording. I think I've addressed everything now. BeanieFan11 (talk) 23:08, 23 August 2024 (UTC)
- Yes, that's everything. Passing the article. Nice work. ~WikiOriginal-9~ (talk) 23:13, 23 August 2024 (UTC)
- Changed the wording. I think I've addressed everything now. BeanieFan11 (talk) 23:08, 23 August 2024 (UTC)
- That's perfect. Nice. ~WikiOriginal-9~ (talk) 23:04, 23 August 2024 (UTC)
- Maybe something like, "He later worked in the radio business and for the NFL draft department of the Houston Oilers, now known as the Tennessee Titans"? BeanieFan11 (talk) 23:01, 23 August 2024 (UTC)
- I can't really think of anything, maybe we need to invent a new word... ~WikiOriginal-9~ (talk) 22:55, 23 August 2024 (UTC)
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.