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GA Review

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Reviewer: Skinny87 (talk) 18:59, 18 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for criteria)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose): b (MoS):
    Wikilink 'Captain' in lede
  1. 'However after an extensive review, in 2000, his medal was upgraded to the Medal of Honor.' - Don't need the first comma.
  1. 'where he led an amphibious assault on a Japanese pillbox in which he was subsequently killed.' - One doesn't lead an amphibious assault, and this needs to be rewritten. Did you mean that he took part in an amphibious assault, during which he led an attack on a pillbox and was killed in the process? Despite the MoH citation there below, rewriting and adding context is vital for the reader.
  1. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
    'While at UCLA, he was a four sport athlete' - What were these four?
Done - I could only find mention of 3 of them. --Kumioko (talk) 02:00, 12 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  1. Last section of second para of Biograpphy is uncited, needs a cite to pass.
Done --Kumioko (talk) 02:00, 12 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  1. Suggest restructuring article - divide it into 'Early life', 'WWII service and death' and then integrate the MoH/DsC section into it.
  1. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  2. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  3. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  4. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
  5. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:
In addition to the items listed above I did a number of other things to improve the article including the following.
  • I added more refs, deleted some weak or broken ones, added some inline citations and cleaned up some.
  • I restructured the awards section.
  • I added more content, fixed some prose and reworded a few things.
  • I added alt text. --Kumioko (talk) 02:00, 12 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Note: The original reviewer, Skinny, was reported as sick, and the first editor reportedly has left wikipedia. Kumioko, who contributed to the article, made changes per Skinny's review. I have reviewed the changes, made some grammatical and punctuation fixes, etc., and passed the article. Auntieruth55 (talk) 23:41, 17 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]