Talk:Francesco di Antonio del Chierico

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This article is or was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Drydenq. Peer reviewers: Realcjcruz, Atsushi Hu.

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CJ's Peer Review of Dryden

Overview - This section is concise and provides an appropriate amount of relevant biographical information. In my opinion, its tone could be a little more neutral. I made a few grammatical adjustments for this purpose, but some of it is just in the structure of the sentences and the adjective choices, like "huge", for example. I've encountered the same problem in my article in that there's an instinct to "loft up" your subject. When writing for Wikipedia though, objectivity and an encyclopedic tone are essential.

Bibliography- I'm confused by the titling of this section. I don't understand why this is called a bibliography, as a bibliography is usually a place where sources are listed, and that doesn't appear to be what this section is. I also don't understand why there are two different sub-sections within this section. I feel like "Life" and "Projects" could each get their own heading, or that these topics, "Life" particularly, could be narrowed down with more specificity. With all of that being said, I understand that you may be working with very limited information in terms of primary sources, so take whatever of this review is useful or pertinent. I'm also a little confused by your chronology and usage of tense. You say that Chierico is a goldsmith before turning to his "future" occupation, but I don;t understand what that "future" is in reference to when everything you're describing is in the past. It may be simpler and make it easier on yourself just to say that he had one occupation, then had another, rather than having to deal with convoluted grammatical conventions.

Other Notes - Overall, your article is easy to understand, with a clear structure and balanced claims built upon reliable sources. It is a solid foundation, and it actually reads like an encyclopedia article rather than an essay, which is the goal. Again, I don't know how limited you are in terms of access to information, or just information in existence for that matter, but if at all possible, a bio-box for Chierico akin to one that could be seen on more famous historical figures that features a picture of the subject and quick "stats" style bullets of biographical information such as the years when he was born and died, where he is from, what he is most know for, etc. Also, if there are any images related to Chierico that aren't just paintings of his, I think that they're presence could do a lot to add to the variety of this article. You're off to a great start, and you're doing a great job!

Atsushi's peer review of Dryden

Overall, the article so far covers quite a bit about his personal life and artwork.

Structure and Layout: I am currently quite troubled by the structure of the article. The pictures do not appear to align with the textual content and appear on both sides of the paragraph, which is, visually distracting. Some information under the overview should probably go to the lead section, which is not existent now.

Citation Consider the limited length of this entry so far, the amount of citation seems to be appropriate

Content Since you jump right into "adult life", I am curious that why you did not mention early life. Is it because of the lack of documentation? I am also interested in art historians' or other people's comments on this artist.