Talk:Fort Southerland/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Zawed (talk · contribs) 06:41, 2 July 2022 (UTC)[reply]

I'll take this one, comments to follow in next few days. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 06:41, 2 July 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Sorry it took so long to come back to this, comments as follows.

Lead

Fort Southerland was included...: suggest breaking the lead here to better differentiate between the historic and modern era.
- Done

Construction

They are generally referred to as forts: link forts?
- Linked at the first mention of forts a bit earlier in the paragraph

Camden Expedition and modern history

If the sources support it, perhaps add a one-liner to the end of the 2nd paragraph noting that there was (presumably) no further action in the area during the war.
- I'm fairly sure this is accurate, but haven't seen anything in the sources, or in a couple other things I've checked
The remains of three of the redoubts were obliterated: perhaps add to the start of the section something to the effect of "In the postwar period, the remains...}}}
- Done
Redoubt A, also known as Fort Lookout: for clarity and greater specificity, suggest stating this is the fourth of the redoubts.
- Clarified
Despite its original site south of the city, Camden's growth has expanded to the north and west sites of the site.: I am uncertain about the construction of this sentence, particularly the usage of "Despite". I think effectively you are saying the growth of the city to the north and west meant that Fort Southerland, being the southernmost of the original redoubts, is the best preserved.
- Significantly reworked
  - Wow, I really misunderstood the original sentence. It is much clearer now. Zawed (talk) 09:43, 12 July 2022 (UTC)[reply]
The first sentence of the 4th para is really long and convoluted, suggest breaking it up.
- Done
Describing the destruction of the earthworks at Camden: suggest "Describing the destruction of much of the earthworks at Camden", presumably those of Fort Southerland haven't been destroyed.
- Done

Other stuff

Sources look OK
I reviewed reference #3 (Mark K. Christ) against what it was cited for and found no issues there.
No dupe links
Image tag checks out OK

Generally looks in order, just minor tweaks required. Zawed (talk) 03:18, 10 July 2022 (UTC)[reply]

This looks good. I am passing as GA as I believe it meets the necessary criteria. Zawed (talk) 09:45, 12 July 2022 (UTC)[reply]