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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 07:29, 28 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]


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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()
3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()
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Being that this article has been in the queue for over two months, it must relieving to see it getting taken on for review... for anyone who sees that this is GA2, that is inaccurate since the first one was supposed to be closed but nobody ever got round to it. --K. Peake 07:29, 28 June 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox and lead

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  • Shouldn't the languages be separated using bullet points instead in the infobox?
  • Add the countries after the names of the cities
  • Add a comma after second studio album
  • "by the two artists alongside" → "by the singers alongside"
  • "Julia Michaels, and its producer" → "Julia Michaels and the sole producer" per British English
  • Add a sentence directly after the above one mentioning that it was supposed to be included on the original version of the album, though Lipa decided the beat did not have a suitable sound, or something similar
  • "It was released for" → "The song was released for"
  • Shouldn't a comma be before "through"?
  • Pipe single to Single (music)
  • ""Fever" is a" → "It is a"
  • "Lyrically it uses a metaphor of infatuation as a sickness, and" → "Lyrically, the song uses a metaphor of infatuation to demonstrate a sickness and"
  • "of Belgium as well as" → "of Belgium, while also reaching the summit of" to be less repetitive
  • Remove the 18 weeks stat, as that is not notable for the lead
  • "The song also reached the top ten" → "It further reached the top 10" per MOS:NUM
  • "It was awarded a" → "The song was awarded a" plus mention the names of the bodies that gave the certifications
  • Remove wikilink on London
  • "but being safe when" → "but have safety when"
  • "It features the two singers" → "The video features Lipa and Angèle"
  • "promoted the single" → "promoted the song"

 Done

Background

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  • Retitle to Background and development
  • "Jacob Kasher Hindlin, and" → "Jacob Kasher Hindlin and"
  • "was handled by" → "was handled solely by"
  • "on her second studio album Future Nostalgia," → "on Future Nostalgia,"
  • "save it for a permutation of the album." → "save the song for a later release." per the source, plus that is accurate anyway
  • "showed her Angèle's music video for" → "showed her the singer's music video for" with the wikilink
  • Pipe single to Single (music)
  • "They had been friends" → "The singers had been friends" because this is the start of a new para
  • Remove wikilinks on United States, Belgium and Paris
  • "the song, and for Angèle to propose changes," → "the song and Angèle also proposed changes,"
  • Shouldn't keyboard be piped to Keyboard instrument?
  • "to sing in French." → "to sing in the language."
  • "The song marks" → "The song marked" but aren't the two statements of this sentence basically saying the same thing reworded?

 Done

Music and lyrics

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  • Audio sample looks mostly good, but maybe mention on the text what part of the song it demonstrates? A source is not required for this info, as it is basically implied.
  • ""Fever" is a" → "Musically, "Fever" is a"
  • Are you sure there should be a comma before with in the second sentence?
  • "while it adds an additional D chord to" → "while an additional D chord is added to"
  • "that includes hand claps and snap sounds." → "that contains hand claps and a snap sound."
  • "synths while it as a whole features airy instrumentals" → "synths, while it as a whole features airy instrumentation"
  • "and French with their" → "and French, with their"
  • Pipe ranging to Vocal range
  • "Lipa begins the song and" → "She begins the song and"
  • "sing together following that." → "sing together afterwards."
  • "and what comes with" → "as well as what comes with"
  • "playful," while Angèle is "softer, pleading, almost despondent."" → "playful", while Angèle is "softer, pleading, almost despondent"." per MOS:QUOTE

 Done

Release and promotion

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  • Remove wikilinks on music video and London
  • "on social media" → "via social media"
  • "that their collaboration would be called" → "that the collaboration would be titled" but the title being revealed and the October 24 date are not backed up
  • Remove pipe on single
  • "it was added to" → "it was set to be added to"
  • "Also that day," → "Also on 30 October 2020," since you last used an actual date three sentences ago plus this has the same meaning
  • "on the physical French editions" → "on the physical French edition"
  • "boudoir wearing matching" → "boudoir while wearing matching"
  • "the two singers performed" → "the singers performed"
  • Is the medley really notable when it does not include "Fever" and artists often perform multiple songs at shows?

 Done

Critical reception

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  • "with one and other." → "with one another."
  • "how the duo's vocals" → "how their vocals"
  • "and called the song a" → "calling the song a"
  • "bop," and commended" → "bop" and commended"
  • "Elvis Presley, and Peggy Lee influences, and saw" → "Elvis Presley and Peggy Lee influences, seeing"
  • "at the same time."" → "at the same time"." per MOS:QUOTE
  • "and undeniably catchy."" → "and undeniably catchy"."
  • "of boiling over."" → "of boiling over"."
  • "especially on the hook, and called" → "particularly on the hook, also calling"
  • "a "satisfying assist."" → "a "satisfying assist"."
  • "praised its beat calling it "fleet" and "efficient," and stating it" → "praised the beat, which they called "fleet" and "efficient", as well as stating it"
  • "They additionally praised" → "The staff additionally praised"
  • Pop should be piped to Pop music for the Euphoria Magazine review instead
  • "dance pop tune,"" → "dance pop tune","
  • Change Consequence of Sound to Consequence with the pipe
  • "infections pop song,"" → "infectio[us] pop song"," because that is probably what the reviewer actually meant despite the grammar
  • Uproxx should not be italicised
  • "thumping pop tune."" → "thumping pop tune"."
  • "on its 2020 best songs of 2020 list," → "on its list of the year's best songs,"

 Done

Commercial performance

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  • "received 14,000,000 streams" → "received 14,400,000 streams" per the source
  • "peak of 69," → "peak of number 69,"
  • The two weeks part is not backed up for the UK and Canada charts, so reword to how it reached the position on both of the charts instead
    • For the UK, if you press the plus symbol next to the song position, it backs up that it up. For Canada, it says that it spent two weeks on the chart and it didn't enter the chart following that week. Unfortunately, the song doesn't appear on Lipa's archive page so this is the only way it can be backed up. Also, what do you mean by "how it reached the position"? Do you mean like "It debuted at number ... and reached a peak of ..."?
  • You can keep the two weeks part, but change the end of the sentence to "peaking at number 79 on both charts" since the countries themselves aren't mentioned by name in this sentence. --K. Peake 07:18, 1 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
  • "debuted at number 2." → "debuted at number two." per MOS:NUM
  • "the chart's summit becoming Angèle's second number one single" → "the chart's summit, becoming Angèle's second number one single in the country"
  • "the chart's summit becoming Angèle's first number one single" → "the chart's summit, becoming Angèle's first number one single in Flanders"

 Done

Music video

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Background and release

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  • Retitle to Background
  • "in mid-October 2020." → "during mid-October 2020." but the tweet does not mention this, or is it sourced by the YouTube video?
  • "was filmed over" → "was shot over" to be less repetitive
  • "had "flouted" rules" → "had "flout[ed]" national rules"
  • "and that the set was raided by" → "claiming that the set was interrupted by"
  • It does not say that the complaints were specifically issued by residents there
  • "who she didn't name." → "who she did not mention by name."
  • "broken, and that" → "broken and that"
  • "with a live chat" → "by a live chat"

 Done

Synopsis

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  • Img looks good!
  • I know what MOS:PLOTSOURCE is, but shouldn't some parts like the clothes being worn require sourcing?
  • "and requesting to take her to" → "and requesting to be taken to"
  • "and apologies to" → "and apologizes to"
  • "The duo goes back onto the streets with" → "The two head back onto the streets, with"
  • "the police cars blue lights" → "the police cars' blue lights" with the pipe
  • "in which Lipa responds" → "to which she responds"
  • Should commas be around her boyfriend's name?
  • "The two then dance" → "The singers then dance"
  • "As they make their way through" → "As the two progress through" to be less repetitive
  • "Angèle, and the two girls sing Angèle's" → "Angèle and the two girls sing the latter's"
  • "and for being too loud." → "and being too loud."
  • "part-goers sit" → "party-goers sit"
  • "smoking, and drinking" → "smoking and drinking"
  • "closes with the duo entering" → "closes with the singers entering"

 Done

Reception

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  • "and cheerful," while" → "and cheerful", while" per MOS:QUOTE
  • "during COVID times." → "during the COVID-19 pandemic."
  • "escape," and thought it represented" → "escape" and thought it represents"
  • "in the COVID-19 pandemic lockdowns." → "in the pandemic lockdowns."
  • Remove pipe on Billboard
  • "where one could go to bar, walk the streets, and" → "where people could go to bars, walk the streets and"
  • Remove wikilink on Rolling Stone
  • "the duo "immersing themselves in London nightlife,"" → "Lipa and Angèle "immersing themselves in London nightlife","
  • "called the places Lipa and Angèle go" → "said they variate between each" or something similar
  • ""lively house jam."" → ""lively house jam"."

 Done

Track listing

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  • Good

Credits and personnel

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  • Should Dua Lipa and Angèle be wikilinked to their respective articles?

 Done

Charts

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  • Good

Certifications

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  • Good

Release history

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  • Good

See also

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  • Good

References

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  • Copyvio score looks phenomenal at 8.3%!!!!
  • Consequence of Sound → Consequence on ref 16, piping to Consequence (publication)
  • Are you sure ref 17 is a reliable source?
  • Normally wikilinking isn't an issue, but shouldn't Apple Music be only linked once per citation for the refs with multiple ones?
  • Cite Uproxx as publisher instead for ref 47
  • Fix MOS:CAPS issues with refs 64, 68 and 69
  • Why does ref 72 not wikilink YouTube?

 Done

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  • Good

Final comments and verdict

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  • LOVI33 Very slick response and I'll tell you this now while you are still awaiting potential comments; I left one improvement still pending for commercial performance and you need to change ref 52's date to using 2020 instead of 2021. --K. Peake 07:18, 1 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]
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