Talk:FU (song)/GA2

GA Review

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Reviewer: Esprit15d (talk · contribs) 16:31, 10 November 2014 (UTC)

I will be reviewing this article and getting back to you within 24 hours.--Esprit15d • talk • contribs 16:31, 10 November 2014 (UTC)

I am sorry for taking longer than I said, but I am still working on it, and will give you a complete review soon--Esprit15d • talk • contribs 02:15, 12 November 2014 (UTC)

I want to commend you and other editors on your work to date. I'm sure a lot of work has gone into the article. Here are my comments:

• The lead should at least mention that the song charted. It should also include the release date.
• In none of the reviews are her vocals compared to Adele, Xtina, or Amy Winehouse. The song is compared to Adele's sass, one review says Miley has an inner Christina Aguilera, and the other review says that the song "FU" is "Amy-Winehouse like". So that has to be removed from the lead.
• In the lead, this line will become dated (if it isn't already), "Cyrus has performed the song during her ongoing Bangerz Tour." Take out "ongoing." If the tour is over (I don't know), take the word "has" out, too.
• The lead says the genre is dance-pop, but the infobox says the genre is dubstep, and the body also throws in pop rap. All three need to match, and the genres in the body need to be referenced. The dubstep is referenced (in a review), but the dance-pop and pop rap genres are linked to a sheet music site (that is subscription only, and only shows the first page). I'm skeptical that the additional pages explicitly confirm those genre classifications (the first page doesn't), which means those classifications amounts to original research. I would recommend finding another site that explicitly states the genres.
• The whole first paragraph under "Background and composition" can be nixed. It doesn't have anything to do with the song and is more appropriate in an article about Cyrus, or possibly the entire album.
• The third paragraph in that section should be first, and the current second paragraph should remain the second paragraph. The sentence that begins, "Its lyrics dismiss a cheating ex, as mentioned..." should be at the end of the second paragraph of that section.
• There should be another paragraph in the "Background and composition" section on release information: the date of release, the name of the label, which formats on which it was released, first live performance, etc...
• "Kyle Fowle of Slant Magazine" -- the magazine needs to be italicized
• Every FU in the article needs to be "FU". (with quotes)
• Under "Critical reception", put all the positive reviews in the first paragraph, and then the less great reviews in that second paragraph, for the sake of continuity.
• "French Montana's appearance; calling it" -- replace the semi-colon with a comma
• Remove ", along with "Do My Thang" and "Maybe You're Right""--the article should just focus on this song, not the whole album
• Shardae Jobson's review can be eliminated, since that journal is not notable (and is, frankly, too long).
• Was the song released in various countries? On different days? If so, I might consider adding a section called "Release history" with the various release dates in various markets. (See We Can't Stop#Release history for an example)
• Also, add a tracklisting section for the single. It may just be one song, but some singles (even digital singles) have a "B-side" or a deluxe edition, so any of those songs or remixes should be included as well.
• I might move the music sample to the paragraph that discusses the lyrics.
• The paragraph under "Charts" should moved to the bottom of the "Critical reception" section, and that section renamed to "Reception."
• One other question: Has the song had any notable covers? If not, that's fine, but I was wondering if this had been looked to, and if some have been found, they should be included in the article.

I'm going to place this article on hold until these matters are addressed. Let me know if you need any clarification.--Esprit15d • talk • contribs 13:50, 12 November 2014 (UTC)

Got through most of the items you listed. As for release date and release history, not much can be found for a song that wasn't released as a single. Another GA Miley Cyrus song, "Drive", doesn't use what you're looking for in this article. DepressedPer (talk) 16:10, 14 November 2014

Now I understand. I assemed that, since it had charted, it had been released as a single. Though, if it was never released as a single, why is there a tracklisting section? ETA: In the comment from "Scott Mervis," include the date and venue to give the statement context.--Esprit15d • talk • contribs 14:02, 19 November 2014 (UTC)

With the ETA you mentioned a week ago and the other previous questions, I think everything is in order. DepressedPer (talk) 02:20, 27 November 2014 (UTC)

The article looks great so I'm promoting it!--Esprit15d • talk • contribs 16:08, 1 December 2014 (UTC)