Talk:Eric Chappelow/GA1

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Reviewer: Peacemaker67 (talk · contribs) 08:12, 19 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Interesting subject. A few comments:

Lead and infobox

I don't see the justification for the citations in the lead, per MOS:CITELEAD. There is no material that is challenged or likely to be challenged, or direct quotations involved. The facts are cited in the body and frankly, they are uncontroversial
suggest "whose arrest, imprisonment, and harsh treatment during that period..."→"whose arrest and harsh treatment during four months imprisonment..."
"It ~~was a newsworthy event that~~ drew the attention of Chappelow's connections"
"and led to a campaign for his release joined by ~~such notable personalities as~~"
suggest "His arrest and the treatment he received was highlighted in the House of Commons by the Liberal [[Member of Parliament (United Kingdom)|MP]] Philip Morrell." with the existing links retained, of course
"it was rescinded and he was arrested in April for refusing to serve"
"in the custody of Philip ~~Morrell~~ and Lady Ottoline Morrell"
"to serve in a Friends' Ambulance Unit in England."
the caption of the infobox image is confusing, he is not to Massingham's right, he is to his left. Suggest "Eric Chappelow (right), photographed by Philip Morrell in 1916"
Given he was British, the death date in the infobox should be DMY
Should his nationality be United Kingdom or British? I would have thought the latter was more correct?

More to come. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 08:58, 19 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks, I will begin working on these issues this afternoon. BD2412 T 13:22, 19 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Strike that, I have gone through and implemented them. BD2412 T 13:45, 19 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Body

Always provide and cite the person's full name at the beginning of the body of a bio article
link suffragist
"in the literary magazine The Athenæum"
even though it is a quotation, some linking is needed for unfamiliar terms, suggest linking metrical to Metre (poetry), and villanelle
for "compulsory service in WWI, link Military Service Act 1916
link conscientious objector at first mention, unlink later one
for Barnes, link Barnes, London, and Mortlake
watch the US spellings, offenses→offences
April 14, 1916→14 April 1916
"the national tabloid newspaper, the Daily Sketch"
suggest "a friend of the pacifist Bertrand Russell"
"~~Bertrand~~ Russell "took up his case with various influential people""
"including the scholar Gilbert Murray"
"The poet W. B. Yeats"
"to ask the playwright George Bernard Shaw"
"Chappelow inwithin the government"
per MOS:ITAL, italicise La Marseillaise and drop the quote marks
"When ~~Bertrand~~ Russell was himself"
"The Home Front, the suffragist Sylvia Pankhurst"
I think his fellowship in the Royal Society for Arts should be mentioned in the lead
"Chappelow won the British Annual of Literature"
combine the last two paras and insert his date of death into the text, as it is otherwise uncited
London is duplinked in the final sentence
it would be preferable for verification purposes to add the publisher, location and isbn/oclc of the print sources
- There are oclc's available on Worldcat for The Athenæum, an issn (or oclc) for The Daily Sketch, an isbn for The selected letters of Bertrand Russell. The public years, 1914-1970, an oclc for The Japan chronicle Weekly edition, an oclc for Tribunal (assuming it is the one published by the Howard League for Penal Reform), an oclc for the Journal of the Royal Society of Arts, an oclc for The Library World, an oclc for The Poetry Review, and oclc for The British Annual of Literature, and an issn or oclc for Poetry Review. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 03:42, 21 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  - Excellent - from this tip on The Tribunal, I was able to find the Hathi Trust reproduction of the issue itself. BD2412 T 04:31, 21 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]
I'm going to call in my go-to-gal on image licensing regarding the infobox image. Nikkimaria, would you mind giving me your opinion on the licensing of File:Eric Chappelow in 1916.jpg? Thanks. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 09:27, 20 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Not sure where the CC BY tag is coming from, as I don't see that licensing at the source site. Assuming I'm not just overlooking it, this would need a US PD tag of some kind in order to be included. Nikkimaria (talk) 13:05, 20 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@Nikkimaria: On the page from which this image originates, beneath the image to the right, is a box marked "Use this image", which takes the reader to a page offering various licensing options, one of which is "Creative Commons", which has a link that goes to this CC BY-NC-ND 3.0 page. Strictly speaking, the National Portrait Gallery has no right to claim copyright in a 1916 image attributed to an author who died 77 years ago, but I played along with their pretense of licensing it. BD2412 T 16:38, 20 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]

I saw that, but NC-ND is not CC BY - if we were to "play along" we would need to use the former, and the former is considered non-free for our purposes. Nikkimaria (talk) 16:41, 20 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]

I removed that tag. I don't see how copyright could be asserted in the United States, given the date of death of the attributed author. BD2412 T 17:28, 20 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]

It would depend when it was first published. Do we know that? Nikkimaria (talk) 17:30, 20 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]

I don't think we know that it was ever published prior to the NPG putting it up on their website, which appears to have been in 2011. So, never published and never registered. BD2412 T 17:34, 20 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Okay, so throw on PD-US-unpublished and this should be fine then. Nikkimaria (talk) 17:38, 20 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Done BD2412 T 17:49, 20 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]

That's it, great job on this. Placing on hold for the above to be addressed. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 09:27, 20 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]

A number of the print sources are relatively old magazines rather than books, so I don't think those have ISBN numbers. There is one unpublished source, The Chappelow Family With a Brief Beardslee Genealogy, which I use only for the point that Chappelow was fired from his government job after going to prison. It does have a WorldCat listing. I think this is a noncontroversial point (it seems obvious that he would be, I just couldn't find it said anywhere else), though the article will survive just fine without if necessary. BD2412 T 22:17, 20 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]

It isn't necessary to do this now, but generally you should try to use one format for citations, eg not a mix of plain ref tags and cite templates, per WP:CITEVAR. This article is well-written, verifiable using reliable sources, covers the subject well, is neutral and stable, contains no plagiarism, and is illustrated by images with appropriate captions. Passing. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 10:16, 21 September 2020 (UTC)[reply]