Talk:Enver Hoxha/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Xtzou (Talk) 22:30, 20 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Hi, I am reviewing this article and will be adding comments. In general, the article is very well written. However, there are some problems.

Per WP:LEAD, the lead should be a concise summary of the article and proportionally represent the article content in summary statements. The current lead is too short and does not represent the article content.
There are sections of the article that lack references. Not every statement needs to be references, but there should not be whole sections of uncited material.
All quotes, such as "enemies of the people" need to be cited. Anything that is in quotations needs a reference.
I have been copy editing the article, mostly for punctuation and wording, but if you find any errors please feel free to revert.
It would be helpful if there was a "Bibliography" section listing all the references used in the article.

Thanks!

I will put this on hold to allow the editor to address the issues.

Xtzou (Talk) 22:30, 20 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Note which sections lack references, please. I will address current "citation needed" ones soon. --Mrdie (talk) 01:49, 24 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Okay. Some of the problem is that the references that are there are obscure, like "The Institute of Marxist-Leninist Studies at the Central Committee of the Party of Labour of Albania, 296." There is no way I can look anything up to verify. Also, when the footnote is "O'Donnell, p. 22.", does that mean the book under Further reading? If so, that section should be called Bibliography and list the full information like Publisher, date, etc. for all the sources used in the article.
Another problem is reference notes in the middle of a sentence, like "Hoxha was born in Gjirokastër, a city in southern Albania that has been home to many prominent families. He was the son of a Bektashi[1] Tosk cloth merchant who traveled widely across Europe and the United States of America, and the major influence on Enver during these years was his uncle, Hysen Hoxha ([hyˈsɛn ˈhɔdʒa])." Does this mean that everthing else in that sentence and the rest of the paragraph is referenced to the reference note at the end of that paragraph?
The article is well written and quite interesting. I would like to see this matter of the referencing clarified.

Xtzou (Talk) 13:54, 24 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I am currently too busy to do anything more than add references, for now. I will, however, address the issues you've pointed out. --Mrdie (talk) 07:24, 25 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Could you clarify the Further reading section and the lack of a Bibliography section. I consider the lack of a Bibliography a major flaw, as there is no way to look up your references without it. Xtzou (Talk) 19:13, 27 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]
I have tried to fix up your references but I cannot without your help. It is hard to decipher what you mean. Xtzou (Talk) 23:59, 2 May 2010 (UTC)[reply]

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

Is it reasonably well written?
A. Prose quality:

B. MoS compliance: : Fails WP:LEAD. Too many short, choppy paragraphs
Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
A. References to sources:

B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary: : There are still paragraphs without any references

C. No original research:
Is it broad in its coverage?
A. Major aspects:

B. Focused:
Is it neutral?
Fair representation without bias:
Is it stable?
No edit wars, etc:
Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:

B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
Overall:
Pass or Fail: Fail

I have done quite a bit of copy editing on this article. The editor has said that he does not have time to address the remaining issues, so I must fail the article. I urge that the issues be addressed and the article be renominated. Xtzou (Talk) 17:34, 4 May 2010 (UTC)[reply]