Talk:Elizabeth Casson/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Dr. Blofeld (talk · contribs) 20:13, 9 August 2016 (UTC)

Lede

• Link University of London
• " Dorset House in Bristol in 1929 with enough space for 800 patients in residence, and opened the first school of occupational therapy in the UK at Dorset House the following year. She took an active role in the therapeutic activities at Dorset House, " -do we need to state Dorset House three times?
• "Casson was awarded an OBE for her work at Dorset House and was also made an honorary fellow of the World Federation of Occupational Therapists. A memorial lecture was set up in her name, and psychiatric unit was named after her at Callington Road Hospital." -when? Nothing mentioned about when she retired or died.

Biography

• Link Denbigh, add in Wales.
• One of her brothers, Lewis Casson went on to be an actor and theatre director. -comma needed after Casson
• "St Mary's College, Paddington" -link?
• Link Southwark
• Link University of Bristol
• "She graduated with her Bachelor of Medicine" - + degree?
• "from University of London" add the and link
• " She expanded Dorset House in 1930 to include the UK's first occupational therapy school, known as Dorset House School, acting as medical director herself." - probably "and became" would be better than "acting as"
• "She actively involved herself in the daily therapeutic activities, often inspired by her artistic childhood and "tried to break down barriers between patients and staff"." -poor use of quotation, paraphrase it.
• "Oxford Brookes University" -link?

It's not bad @Worm That Turned: but are you sure there's nothing more to say about her biographically? It's not very informative about her work and life really. ♦ Dr. Blofeld 20:25, 9 August 2016 (UTC)

I can have a look to see if there's anything more I can add while I sort out the the other stuff you have picked up Worm^TT(talk) 20:28, 9 August 2016 (UTC)

@Dr. Blofeld:, I've covered all the issues you raised and added a few more sentences about her work, mostly about her influences. Is there any area you'd like me to focus? Worm^TT(talk) 21:06, 9 August 2016 (UTC)

Is there nothing else which can be added with this? It's still a little weak for GA to be honest.♦ Dr. Blofeld 09:01, 10 August 2016 (UTC)

Stacey and I are currently digging through our sources to see what we can find - is there any specific area that you think needs fleshing out? Worm^TT(talk) 10:07, 10 August 2016 (UTC)

@Dr. Blofeld: would love to hear your thoughts - we've fleshed out most sections article with more information, and added a whole new section on her activities outside Dorset House (president of at least 3 societies and a bit about some of the talks she gave. Worm^TT(talk) 13:19, 10 August 2016 (UTC)

Looks much better now. I'm going to pass it, good job.

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

1. Is it reasonably well written?

   A. Prose quality:

   B. MoS compliance:

2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?

   A. References to sources:

   B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:

   C. No original research:

3. Is it broad in its coverage?

   A. Major aspects:

   B. Focused:

4. Is it neutral?

   Fair representation without bias:

5. Is it stable?

   No edit wars, etc:

6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?

   A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:

   B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:

7. Overall:

   Pass or Fail: ♦ Dr. Blofeld 13:23, 10 August 2016 (UTC)