Talk:Eastern Air Lines Flight 663/GA1

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Reviewer: ---Dough 48 72 16:48, 25 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Comments:

"a nine-year veteran of Eastern", "Eastern" sounds colliqual here.
"Though the control tower responded that Flight 663 was at a higher altitude than Flight 212, it was, in fact, lower." should be combined with the following paragraph.
The Aftermath and investigation contains many short paragraphs that should be combined.
"The Navy" sounds colliqual.
The sentence "An additional thirteen Coast Guard vessels searched the shores of Long Island salvage efforts." sounds awkward.
Are there any pictures that can be added to the article?

I am placing the article on hold. ---Dough 48 72 16:48, 25 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

"a nine-year veteran of Eastern", "Eastern" sounds colliqual here.

Done changed to "Eastern Airlines".

"The Navy" sounds colliqual.

Done changed to "United States Navy".

Though the control tower responded that Flight 663 was at a higher altitude than Flight 212, it was, in fact, lower." should be combined with the following paragraph.
The Aftermath and investigation contains many short paragraphs that should be combined.
The sentence "An additional thirteen Coast Guard vessels searched the shores of Long Island salvage efforts." sounds awkward.

All

Done did some rewording, and reorganized the paragraphs.

Are there any pictures that can be added to the article?

Not done Only copyrighted image of the plane found - will do later if permissible. Blodance the Seeker 09:45, 26 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I've added a pic of DC-7 into the article. Apart from this, I really don't know what else pics can be inserted into it. Any suggestions? Blodance the Seeker 16:33, 26 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

The article looks good now, so I will pass it. ---Dough 48 72 16:37, 26 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]