Talk:Dyschronometria

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"This can be a sign of cerebellar ataxia,[1][2] lesions to the cerebellum can cause dyssynergia, dysmetria, dysdiadochokinesia, dysarthria and ataxia of stance and gait" seems to be two sentences presented as one. It doesn't quite make sense to me. Also, consider explaining what these things are in common language so that readers will understand. Maybe place a serial comma after dysarthiria if it could go there for clarity? Biosthmors (talk) 02:41, 28 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I fixed this part up a bit, and placed in the serial comma. I am glad you caught that for me, I though I had one in there. I also fixed the sentence stucture a little to explain upfront what a cerebellar ataxia is. Kthomas39 (talk) 20:17, 28 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

"an autosomal dominant cerebellar ataxia (ADCA) which usually means the ataxia is a less debilitating than an autosomal recessive cerebellar ataxia, or an ataxia that is linked to the X-chromosome" sounds like a lot of text that belongs in a Background section, and not the WP:LEAD, as it isn't geared directly towards the topic. Biosthmors (talk) 02:43, 28 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Edited this out because this didn't really contribute or remove information in the article. Kthomas39 (talk) 20:17, 28 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

There are a lot of unnecessary words in the Signs and symptoms section. For example, "This finding leads researchers to question what is it exactly that makes someone forget only briefly what they are doing and where they are." does not give a reader any information about signs and symptoms. Remove? See Deep_vein_thrombosis#Signs_and_symptoms for an example of how readers are expecting this section to read? Biosthmors (talk) 02:46, 28 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I took your advice and cleaned this section up to look more like the article you directed me to which overall made it less wordy. Kthomas39 (talk) 20:17, 28 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Circadian Rhythm is capitalized though it is not a proper noun. Biosthmors (talk) 02:57, 28 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Edited. Kthomas39 (talk) 20:17, 28 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

"This suggests that dyschronometria is more of a conscious problem as opposed to a passive unconscious one such as what having a dysfunction with circadian rhythms would suggest." is out of place in the Signs and symptoms section. Consult WP:MEDMOS for ideas? Perhaps a pathophysiology section? Biosthmors (talk) 03:29, 28 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I actually removed this sentence. In retrospect I do not think this added any new information to the article nor did it leave a gap in understanding when I removed it. I did think about creating a pathophysiology section however I do not think there is enough information to support an entire section at least not currently with the research that is out about Dyschronometria. Kthomas39 (talk) 20:17, 28 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I don't think the statement "Some of the most common misconceptions of dyschronometria have been mentioned above." is justified. For an example of how we document misconceptions on Wikipedia, see List of common misconceptions. Biosthmors (talk) 03:30, 28 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Reordered the bottom part of the article a bit to create a heading titled "Errors and Inaccuracies" where I included both Diagnosing and testing errors. I think this will suit that part better. Thank you again for looking over my article. I really appreciate it. Kthomas39 (talk) 20:17, 28 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Also cited my source. Since I saw there there was a citation needed for it. Kthomas39 (talk) 20:26, 28 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Ambiguity under "Causes">"dyslexia"

(context)--When dyslexia was studied within children, it was found that dyslexic children were often stressed as well as mentally exhausted. These children (Ambiguous part)-- would place little to no importance on their present state It is unclear what this sentence actually MEANS- their state in terms of...what??? Do they mean of being stressed... state of time they are in...what??? Clearer language needed. Moon822 (talk) 13:06, 19 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]

This article needs disambiguation

The article discusses dyschronometria only as an effect of cerebellar damage. It should be noted that similar symptoms can be seen in conditions such as autism, ADHD, and Parkinson's disease. There should be a disambiguation to redirect to "Time blindness"; or the article should be more complete to include other causes Lunar ether (talk) 17:09, 12 December 2023 (UTC)[reply]