Talk:Dumuzid/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Iazyges (talk · contribs) 03:57, 19 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Will start soon. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 03:57, 19 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Criteria

GA Criteria

GA Criteria:

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1.a Y

1.b Y
2
2.a Y

2.b Y

2.c Y

2.d Y (8.9% is highest, due only to incidental copy of a source name.)
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3.a Y

3.b Y
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4.a Y
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5.a Y
6
6.a Y

6.b Y

No DAB links Y
No Dead links Y
Images appropriately licensed Y

Prose Suggestions

*The refs Burkert 1985 and Detienne 1972 have no corresponding citations.

The problem with Burkert was that I originally wrote the paragraph where he is cited in another article and copied it here, but apparently forgot to copy the citation. The problem with Detienne was that I had the wrong date in the reference. 1972 was the date of the original publication, not the date of the version being cited. I have now copied the bibliography entry for Burkert and corrected the date for the citation to Detienne. Both citations should work now. --Katolophyromai (talk) 17:40, 20 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Lede

*In Sumerian myth, Dumuzid's sister was Geshtinanna, suggest In Sumerian mythology, Dumuzid's sister was Geshtinanna,, unless there is only one myth in which she is mentioned, which seems unlikely.

Done. --Katolophyromai (talk) 17:40, 20 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]

In the Sumerian poem Inanna Prefers the Farmer, Dumuzid competes against the farmer Enkimdu for Inanna's hand in marriage. worth noting that (as far as Enkimdu's article says), Enkimdu was the god of farming, as opposed to just a human farmer. If this is true, suggest In the Sumerian poem Inanna Prefers the Farmer, Dumuzid competes against the farming god Enkimdu for Inanna's hand in marriage. or In the Sumerian poem Inanna Prefers the Farmer, Dumuzid competes against the God of farming, Enkimdu, for Inanna's hand in marriage.

The source being cited does not describe Enkimdu as the god of farmers, if I remember correctly. --Katolophyromai (talk) 17:40, 20 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Worship

*not usually be stored without spoiling. suggest not easily be stored without spoiling.

Done. --Katolophyromai (talk) 17:40, 20 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]

@Katolophyromai: That is all my comments, passing now. -- Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 18:36, 20 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]