Talk:Discworld (video game)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Freikorp (talk · contribs) 03:53, 30 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]

I'll take this one. Don't feel obligated but I have a video-game GAN as well if you're interested. Freikorp (talk) 03:53, 30 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Is it reasonably well written?
I'd introduce Ankh-Morpork in the lead as a fictional city-state.

Since there's no wikilinks for "The Broken Drum, and the Shades", I'd give them a brief description is you want to keep them. Same issue for "Dark Wood, the Mines, and the Edge of the World".

"Items can either be examined or used" - this makes it sound like the player has to choose one or the other. Would it be more accurate to drop the word "either"?

"including a sword that goes 'ting'" - what's the context here? Could you simplify this just to say he finds a sword?

I'd merge the last two paragraphs in the 'Development' section, but up to you.

Consider using the ILL template to link to the French magazine Joypad. I.e Joypad [fr], same story with Génération 4

"believed that the graphics are colourful and liked the humour, but criticised the way the dialogue is handled" - do you think this would work better as past tense?

"unwieldy nature of the game" - I'd drop "of the game"

"Discworld commits every point-and-click crime you'd care to mention" - an example of one of these crimes would be of interest

"in Dragon #223 by David "Zeb" Cook in the final "Eye of the Monitor" column" - I really don't see a need to specify the issue number or the name of the column in the prose.

"Entertainment Weekly's Darren Franich" - I'd specify what year this occurred, since it is a significant amount of time since the game was released.

I don't see the point of a one-sentence Legacy section; I'd merge this sentence into the final paragraph of Reception
Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
A. Has an appropriate reference section:

B. Citation to reliable sources where necessary:

C. No original research:
Is it broad in its coverage?
A. Major aspects:

B. Focused:
Is it neutral?
Fair representation without bias:
Is it stable?
No edit wars, etc:
Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:

B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
Overall:
Pass or Fail: On hold until relatively minor issues are addressed. Well done overall. Freikorp (talk) 04:27, 30 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]

@Freikorp:

"including a sword that goes 'ting'" - what's the context here? Could you simplify this just to say he finds a sword? I'm not sure: the sword has to go "ting". Rincewind does find a sword, but it must be tuned, so just saying he finds a sword may not be enough.
Consider using the ILL template to link to the French magazine Joypad. I.e Joypad [fr], same story with Génération 4 Hmm... I never knew about that template before. I'm not sure what the point is if it's highly unlikely ther'll ever be an English article.

I only found out about it recently myself. I think it's pretty nifty, but no worries if you don't think pages will ever be made for those articles in English. Freikorp (talk) 08:29, 31 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]

I hope there's no original research in the development section: The Simon the Sorcerer sources do say they tried to do Discworld and that it was inspired by it, and the Discworld source does say that many publishers had tried to obtain Discworld licences before, but neither explicitly say that AdventureSoft was one of those companies. Is that WP:SYNTH, or is it okay? Adam9007 (talk) 04:33, 31 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Since AdventureSoft published Simon the Sorcerer if their people say they tried to do Discworld first I think that's a reasonable assumption to leap to. Thanks for being honest about it. I'm happy for this to pass now. Freikorp (talk) 08:29, 31 October 2017 (UTC)[reply]