Talk:Diddy Kong Racing/GA1

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Reviewer: FunkMonk (talk · contribs) 19:36, 1 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Another gem from my childhood! FunkMonk (talk) 19:36, 1 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
I know it isn't necessary, but is there a way to reference then plot section?

Thanks for taking this, FunkMonk! Yeah, this was one of my favourites from my childhood. I'm brining this up to GA in memory of Lucia Black, who sadly passed away three weeks ago. She wrote most of the gameplay section, and it's pretty good, so I've mostly left it how she wrote it. We were going to bring this up to GA together, so I'm doing this for her. I've used the manual to source the plot, as it's all described in there. JAGUAR 15:53, 2 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Aw, sad to hear that. Let's try to make a worthy GA then! FunkMonk (talk) 16:55, 2 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

You sourced the first paragraph under plot, could the second one be sourced with the same source?

Moved the citation JAGUAR 15:19, 3 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

It seems the second fair use image is slightly too large, 400 pixels wide is the recommended maximum.

I've reduced the thumbnail JAGUAR 15:19, 3 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Oh, I meant the image itself: https://wiki.riteme.site/wiki/File:Diddy_Kong_Racing_gameplay_1.jpg FunkMonk (talk) 15:25, 3 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Oops, sorry. I've just reduced the image to 400 x 300 pixels. JAGUAR 15:27, 3 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

"but lacks acceleration and manoeuvrability." Lacks in?

Fixed JAGUAR 15:19, 3 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

"it is good at accelerating and manoeuvrability" Acceleration and manoeuvring?

Fixed JAGUAR 15:19, 3 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

"boost one's speed" the player's speed?

Done JAGUAR 15:19, 3 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

"but can still be obtained" Can also?

Added JAGUAR 15:19, 3 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

"all of the balloons are silver" Perhaps explain what this does?

Done, and corrected it to platinum. I've read the guide, and they offer no benefits, they just change colour JAGUAR 15:19, 3 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

"after he conquered his own" After having conquered?

Better JAGUAR 15:19, 3 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

"He turns the island's four guardians: Tricky the Triceratops, Bubbler the Octopus, Bluey the Walrus and Smokey the Dragon into his henchmen." It seems a bit odd that the last part of the sentence follows the colon, perhaps mention the names in parenthesis instead?

Good point, rephrased JAGUAR 15:19, 3 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

"series of races that involves cars" Involve.

Fixed JAGUAR 15:19, 3 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Perhaps it could be mentioned under development or something that the game features several other Nintendo characters than Diddy Kong? I know some of them are named already, but could be nice to have it stated explicitly.

I agree; I've added a bit at the end of the development section. Surprisingly, this wasn't covered at all in any of the development sources, so I found some snippets in a source related to Conker. JAGUAR 15:19, 3 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

"terms of the character's voices." Characters'? I assume this is supposed to be plural?

My bad, fixed JAGUAR 15:19, 3 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

"Game of the Year at the Academy of Interactive Arts & Sciences in 1998, beating Mario Kart 64" Seems funny, when neither game is from 1998?

I know, quite strange! But it firmly says it was from 1998, so I trust it JAGUAR 15:19, 3 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

"Musgrave stated that the concept was "built from scratch" and featured a limited multiplayer version at one point.[21] The unnamed concept was in development over 18 months and evolved from being an animal-orientated racing game to an open world game with Tamagotchi-style features, in which nurturing animals was a "key mechanic".[21] According to Musgrave, the open-world mechanic was inspired from Grand Theft Auto III and was then shifted to a "cute version of Grand Theft Auto set in Africa"." This info doesn't seem to be very relevant to this article? Perhaps trim?

I got a bit carried away. I cut the 'GTA in Africa' part JAGUAR 15:19, 3 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

"was inspired from Grand Theft Auto III" Inspired by?

Cut this JAGUAR 15:19, 3 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

"with critics asserting that the new additions were "gimmicky" and "horribly sensitive" touchscreen controls." Something seems to be missing for the latter part of the sentence to make sense.

I think I see what you mean. Rephrased JAGUAR 15:19, 3 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

"The player can take control of any of the twelve featured characters throughout the game." Only mentioned in intro.

Added a bit to gameplay, and reworded to "eight", as stated in the DS review JAGUAR 15:19, 3 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

"Diddy Kong Racing was received positive reviews" Malformed sentence.

Oops. Fixed JAGUAR 15:19, 3 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

"and at sometimes "repetitive"" At times?

Fixed! JAGUAR 15:19, 3 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@FunkMonk: thanks for the review! I believe I addressed everything, and I've also done some minor fixes. JAGUAR 15:19, 3 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Alright, with the image shrunk, this should be ready for GA! I'm especially glad that some info on the other Nintendo characters was mentioned, as I did not know they are spin-offs from this game (or seems their games were already in development? Perhaps mention this?). Now Banjo and Conker are just overlinked, but I'm sure you can fix this after I pass. FunkMonk (talk) 15:30, 3 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you! I've delinked the characters' names. I did this for Lucia, and am glad that I got this to GAN in two days and passed the day after! We were going to work on this together, but I think I waited too long. The delay of Banjo-Kazooie was already mentioned in the lead and development, however a Conker game was developed until a couple of years later. Thanks again. JAGUAR 15:37, 3 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]