Talk:Devil's Halo/GA1

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Reviewer: Carbrera (talk · contribs) 20:13, 22 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox

This is just a personal preference, but instead of using commas, you could use a flatlist with bullet points for the "Genre" and "Producer" parameters; however, it is unnecessary and just for stylistic purposes
Each genre listed needs to have a source; no unsourced genres in the infobox

Everything in the infobox is based on what's cited in the article (WP:INFOBOXREF) Dan56 (talk) 00:12, 23 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

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"The album was released on October 6, 2009, by Downtown Records and charted modestly, but was well received by most critics." --> "The album was released on October 6, 2009, by Downtown Records; it charted modestly and was well received by most music critics."
Please link "music critics" to the article for "Music journalism"

"Music critics" isn't specified (since it's obvious they would be critics on music), and I think either way this qualifies as an "everyday word understood by most readers in context" (WP:OLINK) Dan56 (talk) 00:14, 23 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Background

"Ndegéocello spent over a year writing the songs from Devil's Halo, being inspired in part by her trip to Ireland. "I went to a couple of pubs and there were much older gentlemen playing the guitar and just singing these amazing, simple songs", Ndegéocello recalled." --> "Ndegéocello spent over a year writing the songs from Devil's Halo, being inspired in part by her trip to Ireland: "I went to a couple of pubs and there were much older gentlemen playing the guitar and just singing these amazing, simple songs", Ndegéocello recalled."

I don't think that's appropriate punctuation, at least based on how I've seen it in magazine/newspaper interviews/profiles; the quote is being used in-sentence, in a sentence that's separate from the first, so a period is more appropriate. Dan56 (talk) 00:16, 23 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Music and lyrics

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Please remove the link to the article for "fusion (music)"

Done. Dan56 (talk) 00:17, 23 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

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"For the song "Slaughter", tried to weave together sonic influences from the producers Trevor Horn and RZA, as well as the bands Yes, Sade, and The Human League" --> Reword please; the first part doesn't make sense to me

It was missing "Ndegéocello", as in "For the song 'Slaughter', Ndegéocello tried to..." Dan56 (talk) 00:18, 23 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Release and reception

Please add the Metacritic score to the "Professional Ratings" box

That would be overemphasis of one source/point of view, IMO (WP:CRIT#Neutrality and verifiability), as well as redundancy; it's already discussed in detail in the section. Dan56 (talk) 00:20, 23 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

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"featuring some of Ndegéocello's most strongest compositions yet.[22]" --> "featuring some of Ndegéocello's strongest compositions yet.[22]"
Please insert a "the" in between "According to Q," and "songs expressing frantic feelings..."

Done and done. Dan56 (talk) 00:20, 23 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Charts

Please use the correct chart format per Template:Album chart

I have no idea how to use that template correctly lol. But I did update the table for accessibility ([1]). Dan56 (talk) 00:24, 23 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

References

"reflist" --> "Reflist|30em"

Done. Dan56 (talk) 00:25, 23 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

End of GA Review:

Great work! An all–in–all well–written article! On hold for seven days to allow for changes. Please @PING me with any questions, comments, or concerns. Thanks and good luck! Cheers, Carbrera (talk) 20:33, 22 June 2016 (UTC).[reply]

Done @Carbrera:, and thanks! Dan56 (talk) 00:25, 23 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks! I completed the charting format for you, I hope you don't mind. I also passed the article, congrats! Cheers, Carbrera (talk) 00:38, 23 June 2016 (UTC).[reply]