Talk:Development of Red Dead Redemption/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 23:50, 7 February 2015 (UTC)

Should have this to you within 48 hours ☯ Jaguar ☯ 23:50, 7 February 2015 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

1. Is it reasonably well written?

   A. Prose is "clear and concise", without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors:

   B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:

2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?

   A. Has an appropriate reference section:

   B. Citation to reliable sources where necessary:

   C. No original research:

3. Is it broad in its coverage?

   A. Major aspects:

   B. Focused:

4. Is it neutral?

   Fair representation without bias:

5. Is it stable?

   No edit wars, etc:

6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?

   A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:

   B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:

7. Overall:

   Pass or Fail:

Initial comments

• Not at all essential, but would there be a chance of having some sort of image for the lead?
• "Rockstar Games published Red Dead Redemption on May 18, 2010 " - I think released sound more accurate, what do you think?
• "One of their studios, Rockstar San Diego, oversaw the work, sharing it with other studios around the world" - what does this mean? Was it developed in more than one Rockstar Studio?
• "Preliminary work on Red Dead Redemption began in 2005" - this is in the Production section, but I was thinking that something as important as this should also be mentioned in the lead?
• I would mention that all the places in the Story and setting section are all fictional - it got me going for a minute that New Austin and Nuevo Paraíso were real places!
• ""[T]here are countryside environments" - why is [T] there?
• "The trailer was a technology demonstration of the Rockstar Advanced Game Engine (RAGE) and was set in the Old West" - the story and setting states that the game takes place during the transition into the modern world?

References

• No dead links, and the citations are all in the correct places, so this meets the GA criteria

On hold

A very good article, this appears to be pure GA material, hence the review feeling a little short. It is mostly well written, comprehensive and the references are in working order. I'll put this on hold for the standard seven days until everything can be addressed. ☯ Jaguar ☯ 14:53, 10 February 2015 (UTC)

Thanks for the review, Jaguar! I've gone through and fixed most of your concerns:

• I would also like to have an image in the lead, but I can't think of any that would be suitable. Only a couple of the other development articles have images in the lead, but I'm not sure if one will work here. Let me know.
• I felt that published would be better, since Rockstar Games is the publisher. However, I'll change it if you wish.
• I've added a list of other developers in a footnote.
• I believe the beginning of development (2005) is mentioned in the first sentence of the lead.
• Clarified that the locations are fictional.
• The original quote was written as "there are countryside environments", but here it's used as the opening of a sentence, requiring an upper case letter; as far as I'm aware, I can't alter the original quote without brackets.
• Removed "set in the Old West".

If you have any further concerns, please don't hesitate to let me know. Thanks! -- Rhain1999 ^{(talk to me)} 20:58, 10 February 2015 (UTC)

Thank you for your response, Rhain, I think that after the changes you have made the article now meets the GA criteria. It was well written to start off with, but passing now ☯ Jaguar ☯ 21:14, 10 February 2015 (UTC)

Thank you! -- Rhain1999 ^{(talk to me)} 21:17, 10 February 2015 (UTC)