Talk:Demon core/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk · contribs) 13:59, 1 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]

I'll get to this shortly.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 13:59, 1 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]

No DABs, one dead link.
Images appropriately licensed.
Trinity nuclear test gadget's core Using the nickname of the Trinity test bomb is probably going to be pretty confusing for most readers.
Done Changed to "device". Hawkeye7 (talk) 21:00, 7 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]
I thought that gadget only referred to the Trinity device? the components of the Trinity and Nagasaki gadgets
No, "gadget" is just the word that the Los Alamos Laboratory used instead of "bomb". Hawkeye7 (talk) 21:00, 7 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]
Link supercritical on first use, link rad, neutron, gamma
Done But the various types of criticality all point to the critical mass article. Hawkeye7 (talk) 21:00, 7 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]
True, but it's hard for a new reader to grasp the difference between them from the text, without clicking on the link. Can you try to add a short bit to clarify the differences? If you can't think of something simple, don't sweat it, I'm just trying to get something that an educated reader can skim over and grasp the essentials without having to click on the link.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 01:02, 8 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]
Where are you on this?--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 22:25, 11 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]
Y I thought it was all done. I have added a little bit more on what prompt critical is so readers don't have to click on the links. Hawkeye7 (talk) 23:26, 26 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]
While not a requirement, you've got different date formats in your refs.
Done Aaarghh. Corrected. Hawkeye7 (talk) 21:00, 7 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]

--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 19:33, 7 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the review! Hawkeye7 (talk) 21:00, 7 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]