Talk:Deinocheirus/GA1

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Reviewer: Casliber (talk · contribs) 08:59, 5 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Right, I'll take a look at this and jot notes below. Will try and give it as big a shove as possible towards FAC. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 08:59, 5 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks, I'll notify co-nominator IJReid! FunkMonk (talk) 12:30, 5 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

~~rather than say " is a genus of large ornithomimosaurian dinosaur", how about " is a genus of large ostrich dinosaur" - no loss of accuracy and much more accessible.~~

Alright, though it may become a problem if changed in the rest of the article, as we have to distinguish between ornithomimidae and ornithomimosauria, which can both be referred to this way... FunkMonk (talk) 12:50, 5 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

My thoughts are that this only needs to be used in the lead, as it is inviting to laymen and is slightly summarized from its full form. IJReid ^discuss 14:55, 5 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Perhaps even have ornithomimisaurian in parenthesis after the term? FunkMonk (talk) 15:13, 5 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Yes, my thoughts were change in lead only as more clarity needed elsewhere. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 02:41, 6 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

....and a few other bones of this animal were first discovered... --> "of this animal" redundant.

Fixed. FunkMonk (talk) 12:50, 5 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

~~.. and Deinocheirus was long thought of as an enigmatic dinosaur.~~ ~~- clunky. How about, "its nature remained a mystery" or something along those lines.~~

Fixed. FunkMonk (talk) 12:50, 5 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

~~The tail ended in pygostyle-like vertebrae, which indicates the presence of a fan of feathers.~~ ~~- "indicate" as vertebrae is plural?~~

Fixed. FunkMonk (talk) 13:40, 5 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

~~Nature (journal) should be italicised?~~

Done. FunkMonk (talk) 12:50, 5 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

~~which was to include the supposedly related genera Deinocheirus and Therizinosaurus~~ ~~- I'd add a footnote here (using the efn|1= format) to clarify current thoughts on their (distant) relationship~~

Added a bit to the article, since it turns out it actually had a bit of support subsequently, and was not just a dead end... FunkMonk (talk) 12:50, 5 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

~~Be good if one of the sources used the term convergent evolution, which could be slotted in, but no bother if not....Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 02:41, 6 February 2015 (UTC)~~[reply]

It doesn't, but the arms aren't really that similar, they're just big, which was apparently enough to group them together back then... The hands and claws are very different. FunkMonk (talk) 13:46, 6 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

aaah ok - good point - nix that then. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 19:12, 6 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

~~Map template file to be noted on File:Map mn umnugobi aimag.png?~~

I think it's this[1], by the same author? FunkMonk (talk) 13:21, 6 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

yeah looks like it - just worth noting (someone makes me do it for all mine...) Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 19:12, 6 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Linked it. FunkMonk (talk) 19:14, 6 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

~~Spell out file source on File:Deinocheirus mirificus forelimb.png (not just link)~~

Done. IJReid ^discuss 05:02, 6 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Sorry, meant write out citation of this article Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 07:57, 6 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Got it now. IJReid ^discuss 15:18, 6 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

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- tight and well-written article. I think it is within striking distance of FA. Good luck. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 11:25, 8 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks, Casliber! I've submitted this for copyedit, but it will probably take a couple months before it reaches the top of the list. Do you think it could be nominated without copyedit? FunkMonk (talk) 19:58, 8 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]