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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 07:50, 27 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Will review for the GAN October 2020 Backlog Drive. MWright96 (talk) 07:50, 27 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:

Lead

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  • "He was on the books" - avoid using idioms per MOS:IDIOM
    • → "registered with"

Early and personal life

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  • "Taylor was born in Shrewsbury, Shropshire, in 1889," - the full date is better off included in this sentence
  • "but sang well and enjoyed doing so.[12][11]" - refs in numerical order please

Football career

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  • "He applied (unsuccessfully) to the Football League for a reduction in the fee," - brackets aren't needed for the word highlighted on bold
    • → "made an unsuccessful application to..."
  • "Second Division Bradford Park Avenue on the way," - Second Division side
  • "as Hearts finished third and again lost in the Scottish Cup semifinal, " - wikilink Scottish Cup to 1912–13 Scottish Cup
  • "this time to Falkirk.[22][21]" -refs in numerical order please
  • "he was left out for a few matches in favour of the young Duncan Currie." - how many matches exactly?
    • five, and added Mr Currie's stats page as source
  • "The "magnificent service" Taylor gave to the club" - according to whom?
    • → "An Athletic News profile of Tom McIntosh cited the "magnificent service" rendered by Taylor to Hearts as one example of the newly appointed Everton manager's "rare intelligence and judgment in signing up young and promising players"." Does that work any better?
  • "after which competitive football was suspended for the duration of the war." - needs to be verified by a reliable source

Later life

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  • "he was reported to be a "confirmed cripple"." - reported by whom?
    • → "his local newspaper, the Blyth News, reported him to be a "confirmed cripple"."
  • "Later that year," - how many months exactly?
    • report in February, benefit in May
  • "He died at that address in 1946 at the age of 56." - think the full date can be mentioned here

Will put the review on hold to allow the nominator to address or query the points raised above. MWright96 (talk) 09:14, 27 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@MWright96: Thank you for reviewing the article. I think I've addressed all your points so far, made some notes above as to changed wording, more explicit sourcing etc. cheers, Struway2 (talk) 11:52, 27 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
@Struway2: Now promoting to GA class. MWright96 (talk) 12:51, 27 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
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