Talk:David Perron/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Nova Crystallis (talk · contribs) 14:20, 20 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewing later. Nova Crystallis (Talk) 14:20, 20 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Still a tad bit short of a lead for a longer article. Done
Any chance of finding which team he was drafted by in the midget draft?
- Believe it was Lewiston Maineiacs
"In spite of this" WP:EDITORIAL. Done
"and participate in the Memorial Cup" Past tense. Done
"Midget B level" Not mentioned in source. Done
Link John Davidson (ice hockey), Doug Weight, and Doug Armstrong. Done
Expand GM out to general manager, you haven't mentioned what the abbreviation meant. Done
Be consistent with the use of ellipses.
"runner up" Dash needed. Done
"2011–12 camapgin" Done
"although the following season would be his last. In his final season with the team, Perron failed to maintain his scoring prowess" A bit of editorializing and puffery, especially with the source only showing stats. Done
Misspelling for Ref 33's title (30 Thoughts). Done
"During the preseason games, Perron recorded three goals and four points in three exhibition games." Maybe change it to "Through three preseason games, Perron recorded three goals and four points." Done
"Penguins lone goal" Missing apostrophe. Done
"Perro said" Done
Starting to realize that there's a lot of quotes in the article...
Link Ironman Triathlon, Chris Stewart (ice hockey, born 1987), and Ryan Johansen. Done
Feels a bit disproportionate to have only four sentences for the 2nd stint with the Blues, are you sure there isn't more info for that year? Done
"left exposed" Unprotected sounds better for this situation. Done
"19 point" Plural. Done
Link Injured reserve list and Boston Bruins. Done
"eventually losing in Game 5." Lost the series in five. Done
"an interior designer, have two children together" Not supported by Ref 85. Done
AGF on French sources.

That should be it. Nova Crystallis (Talk) 07:57, 31 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Nova Crystallis, done! A small part of me wants to bring the references to a nice rounded 100. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 23:21, 31 July 2020 (UTC)[reply]