Talk:David Bridges/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: NapHit (talk) 16:27, 18 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I shall be reviewing this article against the Good Article criteria, following its nomination for Good Article status.

Disambiguations: none found

Linkrot: refs 53, 56, 57, 66, 67 and 68 are dead. NapHit (talk) 16:27, 18 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Checking against GA criteria

GA review (see here for criteria)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
"but was released at the end of the 2003–04..." need to add season at the end

"Bridges began his career with local side Cambridge United, having joined the club at the age of 8, progressing through the club's youth system and signed his first professional contract in February 2002" an awkward sentence I would change it to "Bridges began his career with local side Cambridge United, whom he joined as an 8 year old, he progressed through the club's youth system before signing his first professional contract in February 2002"

"He broke into the first-team towards the latter stages" I would just change 'latter stages' to 'end'

Wikilink America on its first use

"playing a total of four times for Braintree, all of which were victories" this sentence has a word missing, change "playing" to "he played" and remove a total as its redundant

"He scored once for Histon in a 3–0 home win against Solihull Borough,[21] making eleven appearances and helping the club achieve promotion to the Conference South in his two months at the club." this sentence should be split into two as it is two separate pieces of information that are not related and they way it is currently worded makes it seem that is the case

"He played a total of 31 games" Again 'a total' is redundant there are other instances as well which need removing

"as well as netting in the next game" use scoring instead of netting

"He eventually made his debut for the Hertfordshire outfit" use club instead of outfit

"followed this up with a brace" some readers will not be aware what a brace means, so I would simply say "two goals"
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
Dead links listed above need to be replaced

"Bridges grew up in Cambridgeshire,[12] and attended St Peter's School in Huntingdon.[12] He supports Manchester United." No need to use the same reference three times in one sentence just use it once at the end.
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):

Is there nothing else that can be added to the personal life section, how about a style of play section as well?
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:
It's close to GA standard just iron out these concerns and your done. NapHit (talk) 16:27, 18 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

Thanks for taking the time out to review the article.

I have dealt with all the prose issues you raised.

As for the references, I don't know why those links are coming up as dead, because they're not, all the links are perfectly fine. I think it's because BBC Sport changed the website's format a few years ago and, as a result, links come through as being dead/redirected when they're actually not. Have also sorted out the referencing in the 'Personal life' section.

That's all I could find on Bridges' personal life unfortunately. I will add a 'style of play' section in a short while. I will write a little note on this page when I have completed the section.

Thanks. --SBFCEdit (talk) 21:23, 18 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Added 'Style of play' section. --SBFCEdit (talk) 03:05, 20 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]

All my concerns have been satisfied, I'm happy to pass this article well done. NapHit (talk) 18:09, 20 September 2010 (UTC)[reply]